Black Poetry : Tormented In the can

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  1. Nahshon

    Nahshon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I fell for this cute little fish that swam around my neighborhood...
    She was cute as our kind can get and the ocean sure did her fins good.
    I try to approach her just wanting to get to know her better
    Only for us both to be caught in a fishermans net
    Now we lie within this sardine can always 2 sardines away from each other
    Eternal torment never close enough to know or touch her
    We lie with in this can...till we are finally devoured...


    Nahshon-Rae 06/30/2003
     
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    :love: that was very cute. That made me laugh HaHa
     
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    nice scribe.......original....and unique...i like it
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis flava flow was very tyte and unique
     
  5. Nahshon

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    thanks for your comments...
     
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    I like this. Your style is always so original. I like that about you. :wink:
     
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    lol, how very very ironic!! me and men, 2 sardines apart from each other...

    this was cute!
     
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    This was to funny thanks for the laugh....

    AqueenPassing
    :wave:
     
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    Glad to see that the pains of a little fish...can be so humorous to others...
     
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    Hi Nahshon,

    I see this as an quite tragic piece about two souls who are kept apart and never realize love before they die. Maybe it's just me, though.

    I like it very much. Very unique piece.

    Peace to you!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
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