Black Poetry : took my breath away

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  1. mochablaze

    mochablaze Active Member MEMBER

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    YOU TOOK MY BREATH AWAY


    You took my breath away baby
    and nah I don't mean that in a romantic way.
    You sucked the life out of me
    to the point where I don't want to live another day.
    nothing is the same.
    I find my self unable to breath.
    heart racing uncontrollably.
    messed up mentally.
    Oh man how you hurt me
    to the point I can't believe
    or concieve
    how you could do this willingly.
    Never in my life have I ever felt so sickly.
    so shocked there is nothing that can be said
    not understanding where I went wrong
    going crazy replaying every moment in my head
    my only place of comfort is my bed
    as I lay in a fetal position
    going through my stages of different dispositions
    anger, hurt, frustration
    shock, denial, humiliation
    there is nothing left to hold on to.
    truth is I got played for a fool.
    just laying here
    I guess trying to survive,
    but in reality praying and wishing to God
    that tomorrow I won't be alive.
    at least not to feel this way another day.
    baby you got me lookin' crazy right now and I ain't Beyonce,
    but on the real it's my fault
    for believing that a thing called love exisisted today.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome !!!

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the family and home u found
    welcome from above as i bless u some love
    tyte scribe happy u here joining us in flow
    as we bond and grow as one giving love and recieving it
    nice to feel ya pen friend :spin: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave: welcome to destee...
    indeed very nice to feel ya pen...
    flow on...
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome mochablaze :)

    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:

    Way to come wit it...sorry it had to be about somethin so sad but I do hope that in your release you find your peace :grouphug:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome!!! That poem so captured the feeling of being heart broken. Whew...I was feeling this.
     
  6. mochablaze

    mochablaze Active Member MEMBER

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    thanks everyone for welcoming me. I greatly appreciate the love and feedback.
     
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    most welcome now da release will feel better
    as we embrace u within u kin now .....
     
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    Welcome! :wave:

    Your flow is awesomely emotive!
    Feeling your flow!
     
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