Black Poetry : too late part 2

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by gempis, Apr 3, 2004.

  1. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    there's been the personal hell desert to cross
    unholy trinity of diseases
    she fought for her mind and her life
    so hard and for so long and it will never be 100 percent gone
    her parents set her up to be neurotic
    the wounds completely healed but scars remain
    there's been the work mountain to climb
    busting butt her entire adult life
    to make ends meet but only staying
    one or two steps ahead of poverty because
    her passions don't seem to pay much
    or there's not enough work in them
    there's been the love river to cross
    she's never had a decent, loving relationship
    she attracts the wrong people and
    has been abused or dissed by all of them
    has never really been in love
    is not sure that truly exists
    but the summit is approaching finally
    the light can be seen
    life may get easier soon
    she may, at last, be free
    yet
    she worries that it's too late for her
    that
    the battles have beat the caring right out of her
    and once she gets all she has been striving for
    that she'll be too tired and jaded for it to matter anymore
    she may be so used to being on guard and tense
    that she can't learn how to relax and let down defense
    and when it comes to love
    cynicism might reign
    hopes crushed too many times
    for her to open her heart again
    20 years of struggle may
    weigh too much to throw away
    looking ahead she strains to see
    prays to Spirit, 'don't let it be too late for me'
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Taking a deep breath...wow. You looked at so many angles here, what helped shaped this soul initially, the strife of the life, the hopes for the future. And in all this, you laced the flow together wonderfully.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u sho nuff didn't miss a corner here very well done sistah i mean wow !!!
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i love when u share your work
    been a while
    this was tight
    posed well my sister
    thank you
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    watzinaname stated it so perfectly "you looked at so many angles, what helped shape this soul initially, the strife of the life, the hope for the future."
    thank the good lord, hopefully, it is never to late
    wonderful piece..
     
  6. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    watz, you honor me with your words. Thank you so much - means a lot.

    $$RICH$$, a "wow" from you is really somethin. Thanks for the support, baby. Much love.

    mzblk, aww. I am touched, sis. Thanks for being a good friend. Much love to you. :grouphug:

    deepy, thanks for the love and thanks for the faith. It's probably fairly obvious that the "she" in this is me......

    Thanks fam :wave:
     
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    much love to you sis
    feeling the script
    you have drop on this canvas
    the release is indeed
    deep
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  8. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey sweet sister Blue, thanks so much for the love on this piece. And peace to you. :grouphug:
     
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    It's never to late...it's only to late when you give up and don't have the courage to ask for what you want. To drag this out for over 20 years tells me that you are stronger than even you are willing to acknowledge. The strong WORRIOR in you kept you going. All is yours for the asking.
     
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    when you write like this...
    I feel as if my soul is being exposed...
    wow...just know I feel your work inexplicably
    :bowdown:
     
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