Black Poetry : TOMORROW'S RAIN

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  1. Sierra

    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Shelter's protection,
    I long for
    from the coming
    of tomorrow's rain.

    My life is imprisoned
    by gripping anguish,
    exclamated by
    crippling inner pain.

    Cold and shivering,
    I am trapped under
    the weight of its
    torrential downpour.

    I am soaked, drenched.
    I cannot breathe.
    I'll drown here like this,
    if I do not discover
    something, anything, more.

    I watch in horror
    as the second hand
    tells me today
    is about to turn
    into another tomorrow.

    I seek
    undetection
    in the depths
    of opaque shadows

    I cling to my faith
    and hope I find
    peace hidden in
    its deepest folds.

    If I achieve this,
    perhaps, I'll avoid
    the dreadful coming
    of tomorrow's rain.
     
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    NADIA*BINTA Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that was profound... feeling that flow completely... keep the flow coming...

    peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ummmm! dis was very nice love how it was posed & written
     
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    Magnificent

    Every now and again, one stumbles over a poem so profound or so distinct it remains imprinted on the brain. This was lovely and breathtaking, mainly for the imagery it brought to mind and the fact that I too was afraid of tomorrow's rain. I don't know if you write from current experience or simply inspiration, I have to say that you must never be afraid of the 'rain'. This is what you learn from and this is what makes you...You don't have to walk through with no shelter. Allow your friends, family, or god be your umbrella through the bad times, and you will make it through.

    I don't know... maybe I read too much into this, or maybe thats what you meant but it really made me think. Thanks for the food for thought.


    I'm just sayin...:eek:
    The dreamer
     
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    well written. Hope the dread goes away. Dream I don't think^ you read too much into it....it pricked your heart sweetie...sometimes poems have a tendency to do that :)
    Sierra good scribe
     
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    Hi NADIA, $$RICH$$, DREAM WEAVER and SWtT, :wave:,

    Thanks to you all for writing!! I appreciate and value your comments. All of you are so very kind!!

    Dream Weaver, you related my exact emotions. I am at a better place today than I was when I wrote this, but I am still searching.

    I wish you all much peace.

    ~Sierra~ :)
     
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    Your fate is in the palm of your hands!
     
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    I cling to my faith
    and hope I find
    peace hidden in
    its deepest folds....words of hope give light in times of darkness...thanx for the light
     
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    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi, 1poetsought,

    You are so right! I must try to find a way to control my destiny! Thanks for guiding me in the right direction!

    Sierra :)
     
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    Hi cypher,

    Thanks for the kind comments. I keep trying to hold on to the light. But, it always seems to slip through my hands.

    Bye,

    ~Sierra~ :)
     
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