Black Poetry : Tomorrow Came Suddenly

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticdelight, Aug 18, 2001.

  1. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    a brand new day
    came my way

    as crystal blue
    skies soared away
    above the clouds
    for joy

    rays of sunshine
    beaming copper alloy
    as i enjoy

    life galore
    exploring metaphors
    while you adore

    the secrets thoughts
    of my mind four stars
    to score

    mi amore
    forever my lover boy



    apt copyrighted 2001
     
  2. SuNNiOne

    SuNNiOne Active Member MEMBER

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    I really enjoyed reading this. I loved your
    rhyme scheme. This one kind of just flowed.
    On the mellow tip.
     
  3. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    thanx poet

    pd
     
  4. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey PD

    Nice flow...
    The third verse puts you out there in the sunshine..

    K
     
  5. Hunter

    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what a wonderful moment in rhyme!!

    I loved reading this one poet

    *rhyme*
     
  6. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    Kitana and Hunter

    thanx ya'll

    pd
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it bees like that...

    when it's all good.:)...seems like a brand new day just comes too quick.

    feeling ya.
     
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