Black Poetry : To Victoriously Fail

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  1. Soullyricist

    Soullyricist Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I lapsed in my effort
    To write ****
    Cause for some reason
    I seem to steam in the presence
    Of my own wit
    I allocate my pain
    To each twin in my brain
    As controversy of whose rain
    Started this ****** up game
    My discretion is without belief
    I never cease to remember that opposite side
    Of peace I lived in and how it stemmed from the roots
    Of that past
    It did not last because of the wreck
    I totaled my naïve heart
    With each speck in my
    Big brown eyes
    That continuously lied
    About the endless nights I cried
    And the many times I died for him
    I lapsed in that stone
    But as for my new dome
    My new peace
    Piece of mind that I climbed
    To the highest mountain of bliss
    I touch the ceiling of elation with my bare fists
    And this
    Is my outcome
    And that is where I’ve come from
    So I can love my life and the new man I’m with
    Despite the chance that if he leaves
    I may grieve
    But you can believe
    That the failure will have won

    © Tawanda Roberson
     
  2. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was beautifully put...
    Funny, I just recently left this world...

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
  3. Sweet baby_face

    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i was feeling that real hard
    that deserves much snaps and claps
     
  4. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Simply beautiful. Every perception we have is based on a culmination of what we have been through.
     
  5. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beautiful...
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful piece :)
     
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    hey Soullyricist
    this is wonderful
    and beautiful
    Peace
     
  8. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    forget that this piece word for word was deep....

    l will definitely be on the look out for more flowz from you...

    nfinite...
    jh
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a wonderfully crafted piece...the flows
    of emotion are deep.

    peace,
    angelic
     
  10. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    this was deep...
    i like this
    peace
    khasm
     
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