Black Poetry : To the Beat of His Drum

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  1. jus_dat_nice

    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A simple Beat
    A simple Rhythm
    A joyous Sound
    Pounding fists
    A fury of Sounds
    And Notes
    How can it form such beauty?
    BOOM BOOM BA BOOM!!
    The Drummer laughs
    He casts a spell on you
    All you can do is laugh
    Spin and twirl and whirl
    Faster and faster
    Louder!
    The Beat takes over you
    You have no control over your body
    The Beat of the Drum
    It moves your Hips
    Faster and faster!
    Louder he plays
    He has you
    You're his

    The Rhythm changes
    Th furious banging ceases
    Boom ba boom boom ba
    The Drmmer caresses the Drum
    Slower and slower
    The Notes and Sounds whisper to you
    A gentle lullaby
    The movement of you Hips changes
    The Drum speaks to you
    Tells you to slow down
    Take your time
    You have all night
    The soft caress speaks to your Body
    Your Hips respond on their own
    Your mind is transfixed on the Drummer
    Strong yet tender
    The Sound becomes second nature
    "You're beautiful" you whisper
    The Drummer smiles
    His hands speak to you
    The Drum speaks to you
    The gentle Music caressing your Body
    Strokes your cheek
    Kisses your lips
    The Deat takes over you once more
    You sigh

    Even slower he drums
    Almost agonizingly slow
    He's teasing you
    He's showing you who's in charge
    The Drum speaks again
    Do you love me?
    "Yes" your Hips responds before your lips could
    You lokk at the Drummer again
    His Music stops
    His Drum ceases to speak to you
    You gasp
    Your Hips stand still
    Your eyes fill with tears
    The Drummer smiles once more
    His hands take off
    The Beat takes over you
    Your Body continues to speak with his Drum
    I love you the Rhythm tells you
    "I love you, too" your Hips reply
    THe Drummer smiles
     
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    And the beat goes on !!!
    this was tyte and very playful poeticly
     
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    WOW I have a piece i wrote many moons ago about a brotha on the drums
    Made a sistah all :nuts: lolll dont tell him though shoo lol
    Fun read poet :)
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    i'm smiling too

    poet this was very smooth you took it and put me there :terrific:
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i feel the luv nd i thank u :hearts2:
     
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    Your lines were mesmerizing, just like the beat of his drum, your lines brought us right into that rhythm, that tempo. Much enjoyed.
     
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    JusDatNice - A poetic rapture that grabs ya and doesn't stop the beat that holds the reader. Hynotic in its delivery. Great job done. Namyh
     
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    it's time...

    ...to visit paradise...and move to the beat of the island drums, man. THANK YOU, POET.

    LET'S DANCE, Y'ALL.
     
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    Clyde C Coger Jr going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    In the Spirit of Sankofa!




    baller,

    The pillars and foundations are coming back Home, thank God! It has been rough ride for the sisters and brothers!

     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks again for all your support:SuN018:
     
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