Black Poetry : To Save You

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  1. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh man oh man,
    there's nothing i can do.
    to save the love of my life,
    and i want to.
    i wanna take you away,
    and put you in a safe place.
    and take the key,
    and divide it between you and me.
    so i know you can't be hurt,
    or harmed.
    cuz i'll love you so much,
    that we'll be closer than the skin on your arm.
    i'm reaching to grab you,
    your soul-your heart-your hand.
    but the more i try to reach you,
    the farther i sink into sinking sand.
    and i know fighting it,
    will make me sink.
    but to save you,
    is all i can think.
    cuz death can't be too bad,
    or at least any worse.
    than for me to know that the one i love,
    will undoubtably be hurt.
    i hate it-------i hate it,
    i'd kill or die for you to live.
    but there's nothing i can do,
    or could have earlier did.
    and you're not safe,
    you're in harms way.
    oh the things i'd give,
    to have you in my embrace.
    nothing can compare,
    to the way i feel when you feel peace.
    it makes me feel like i've been blessed by and angel,
    and no earth is beneath my feet.
    and i know these words sound simple,
    and don't bare much weight.
    but i'd do anything to have you right here,
    so that i know you'd be safe.
    but i can't save you,
    and there's nothing i can do.
    and i'm afraid that,
    i'll------------------------i'll lose you...... :crying:
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    D*mn!!!!!! YOu got a brother feeling this drop, I love this poem :deal: :deal: :deal: :deal: :deal: :deal: :deal: I can feel the sincerity in this piece its BEAUTIFUL :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the warm feeling this give was a
    awesome feeling keep flowing
    my heart beating rapidly ...wow!!!
     
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    Hard to watch when you know someone is is hurting and you can't save them, this was heartfelt. I could feel the ache.
     
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    Sometimes life provide a "No win situation" it's not fair, but it's true. This was so touching and felt from the heart. I feel your pain.
     
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    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank ya'll for the love, i really 'preciate it. i had been going thru some stuff that day, and got caught up in my feelings at the moment. again, thank u. :lips:
     
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    lilcherry,
    you have packed love, desperation, regret etc.
    all into this write......
    very vividly done
    nice write.....

    Peace and Blessings..
     
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    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you rasheed, your words mean alot :wave:
     
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