Black Poetry : to JEUANIMO

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by bahati, Jul 4, 2003.

  1. bahati

    bahati Active Member MEMBER

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    love lost
    mine you were
    stupidly enough what did i do
    it's all blur

    read your response
    feel like i'm choking
    all that i want
    all my hope
    is broken

    feels like by some hand
    my heart gets sqeezed
    very tight grip
    will not be eased

    come back to me
    i know i was wrong
    i am down on my knee
    begging and imploring thee

    promises to you
    i will utter
    i'll make it up to you
    forever and a day
    will never again be an obstacle
    in our way
    to happiness together
    we'll always have sunshine weather

    when you finally stop
    retaliating
    when you finally let me back in
    again

    please baby
    i need you
    seriously
    in my miserable life
    no longer can strive

    don't you think i've suffered enough?
    do you really think
    it isn't tough
    to have been without you
    for so long?

    i simply won't accept
    that the most important
    part of me
    has GONE

    I still love you J.
     
  2. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it's hard to see the one you love WALK AWAY...even when it's your fault. all you know is THERE IS A VOID where so much happiness was...darkness overshadows your once bright future...and confusion rains constantly.

    feeling this.

    let the river flow.
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nice

    I can feel the consuming nature of losing someone you love in this poem. Being in a crowd, yet still feeling empty and all lone. Incomplete voids are hard. Disabling to the degree.. of unfinished business. Time.. sometimes many years will pass where you will find yourself, thinking about this person. Wishing. Hoping still loving.
     
  4. bahati

    bahati Active Member MEMBER

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    thanks y'all feeling me. it's hard - even more so when you know it's your own fault
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed when we face the facts of our own fault
    it make it harder coz we know, yet we bounce back
    to a beat but it still remain in the mental mind
    i feel u on this piece