Black Poetry : to a mister from a sister( for the ladies ...)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by herlove, Apr 16, 2003.

  1. herlove

    herlove Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    now this is about a mister
    trying to be the hipster
    he was never clever
    continueously in stormy weather
    like the wind he blew wherever
    you think this brother would get it together

    listen all things are not what they seem
    his smile warms you like the sun rays's beam
    still his stanz ..... the opposing team

    yet, you insist to cling
    as if you have severed your wings
    could this be about things
    we all want to sit upon thrones of kings
    missing all that true love brings

    his charm you couldn't resist
    you thought you live a life of eternal bliss
    the truth is you'd only wish

    so you hunger for his kiss
    such a pity he'd check you off his list
    now, you all pissed
    funny how life flips and twist
    surely you'd ge pass this

    now you wonder what went wrong
    you knew he didn't love you all along
    feel as if you don't belong
    would you stop with the sad song

    what about you didn't trust
    instead you gave way to lust
    first love yourself , now that's a must
    baby gurl,,, you r still a plus

    you'll be the gem
    he thinks of when his light grows dim
    far at this pace
    he has already lost the race
    life will be the judge
    the truth it dose not budge

    now this is what went down with the mister
    be strong my sister
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    heard dat ! ladies beware......
     
  3. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    On point!

    This was straight up on point! And you scribed most eloquently with your own flair and style...I loveded it!:D
    MORE,MORE,MORE!:D

    Blessings On Ya House!
     
  4. herlove

    herlove Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank u both ...... so my sista msluciousb u liked that girl some times the truth has to be told yeah
     
  5. Kimdricka

    Kimdricka Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    heeey now!! speak it like it is! this was one of those pieces that was felt and i'm still feeling it. keep it up!

    Kim
     
  6. herlove

    herlove Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sure i open for any remarks ..... and i have not given thought to what form this poem was written in .... other than the is how it came to me . to : lasciveusgigolo

    thanks kimdricka
     
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