Black Poetry : Tip of my Pen

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Dec 3, 2003.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    She’s aching
    To be loved in a way
    That she only reads in books
    But has never been witnessed or displayed

    So with the tip of my pen
    I
    Wrote to her soul
    I
    showed her my soul
    I
    Captured her mind
    Cuz I
    Gathered the time
    To
    Feed her hunger
    That
    She had always suffered
    All
    I could do was write from within
    And… well,
    It only took the tip of my pen

    She’s dreaming
    Of life, cuz she’s not living
    In this world cuz she doesn’t
    Indulge in what they are giving

    She feens
    For the touch of affection
    That her peers never tried
    Cuz they all were caught up in their own reflection

    She prays
    That she will fall
    Into a trance that will blind her from all
    Of the hate that churns and crawls

    She prepares
    For the worse, cuz the best doesn’t come
    Only for those that deserve it
    But those are only some

    So with the tip of my pen
    I
    Wrote to her soul
    I
    showed her my soul
    I
    Captured her mind
    Cuz I
    Gathered the time
    To
    Feed her hunger
    That
    She had always suffered
    All
    I could do was write from within
    And… well,
    It only took the tip of my pen
     
  2. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oops

    I kinda messed up on this poem, but oh well, if u like it, i love it, peace.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed this poem is very tyte
    love the flava of it keep flowin !!!
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight write...
    with the tip of ya pen...
    work that pen gurl......:angel1:
     
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    messed up?!? naw gurl
    I
    was feelin this flow for real...
    I
    really liked it lol :lol: :D
    but seriously this was silky smooth :)
     
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    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hot: I LOVE THIS! I can see myself in this peice, I'm right there with this.
     
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    A tip of the hat!
     
  8. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aw honey, everytime you say you messed up or it isn't that good, I don't know what the ell you're talkin about. This is sooooooo beautiful. I am feelin you and lovin this. Much love and respect.
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sister your captured this with the utmost perfection...
    Loved the mood you set here...
    I'm totally enwrapped in the vibe..
    wrought by the tip of your pen...
     
  10. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Like I said...

    if you like it, I love it..lol. thanks yall. Im glad u can feel my flow from the "tip of my pen"