Black Poetry : TINY POEM II

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Joyce, Dec 10, 2006.

  1. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Drawn

    I drew a picture
    Upon his soul.
    He opened up and
    Swallowed it whole.

    For the better,
    He was rearranged.
    As his woman,
    I learned the value of change.


    Copyright © 2002 by Sistah J
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes yes yes this was beautiful
     
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    Hi Joyce
    I agree this was indeed beatiful
    Its like a flower opening up to the change :)

    Peace & Love
     
  4. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Bluewater and Rich, for the kind words.
     
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    Some changes can embrace into a forever love. Quite lovely poetess.
     
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    So mellow is your flow... nice read!

    N2:shades:
     
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    Nice rhyme nice flow wonderful rhythm but the most important part of a poem is the meaning and you conveyed yours well.
     
  8. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you poets...your words really mean a lot to me.:blowkiss:
     
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