Black Poetry : THOUGHTS

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  1. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sometimes i feel like my emotions,
    are pathetic.
    no way to truly explain anything,
    but the opposite of the way i feel.
    cuz the moment i'm ready to be more than i am,
    i'm shot.
    shot where it hurts the most,
    in my mind.
    see bcuz my hearts been so vulnerable lately,
    that i just let it go.
    and let who ever wants it,
    have it.
    and that's my problem,
    but at the same time my solution.
    leaving my face twisted,
    into my emotions.
    eyes telling the stories,
    of loves gone and come.
    while i find myself aching,
    waiting for comfort.
    only finding it,
    in my turmoil.
    but what troubles me the most,
    is that it's all i can do.
    cuz every time i try something else,
    it falls apart.
    leaving me wounded,
    and unsure of what will become of me.
    when i have already overcome,
    the worst of it.
    never realizing the situations,
    were lessons being taught.
    class COMFORT 101,
    prerequiste PAIN.
    pain held me writing this,
    while comfort consoled me to continue.
    and my emotions appeared in the midst,
    to tell me what to feel.
    cuz my heart was no longer there,
    to guide me.
    and all that was left,
    was my mind.
    my last hope,
    my last resort.
    my final escape,
    and the only thing that was real all along.
    and while i know this makes no sense,
    i write it out.
    bcuz even though pain is increasing inside me,
    comfort will make me happy writing this.
    and even if you don't understand,
    i know that in my mind it's like 2+2.
    showing me the reason 4 things to be,
    and why they shouldn't.
    but then sometimes i feel like,
    others that don't understand don't want to.
    and i know that's just my emotions again,
    making me feel that way.
    cuz i only want them to understand,
    so that i can too.
    and that's how i give up my heart to anyone,
    by wanting their emotions to replace mine.
    never once thinking within myself that,
    my emotions are mine.
    and no one,
    no one will understand them.
    not completely,
    not ever.
    bcuz i feel,
    shallow.
    when in reality,
    i'm deep.
    deeper than this world,
    or I will ever know-------------------- sometimes............
     
  2. GOD1CUPID

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    THIS WAS A PIECE I AM BLESSED TO READ, ALTHOUGH IT SEEMS THAT YOU HAVE ENDURED MUCH PAIN WHILE/PREVIOUSLY TO WRITING THIS. DON'T TRIP CAUSE ONE THING YOU HAVE TO REMEMBER........EVERYTHING HAPPENS FOR A REASON, EVEN IF YOU WOULD NEVER KNOW THE REASON.
     
  3. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks GOD1CUPID, i'm glad to hear you say those things....i did endure some pain before writing this one..........but i have overcome.........and won.........thank you again (smile).............one love :heart:
     
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    Class dismissed, on the strength of this!!!

    Holla out to shout it out.
     
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    That was deep..
    don't deny your emotions..they are yours..allow yourself to feel...mmph the power of words..
     
  6. Poeticsoulsista

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    Thanks for sharin. I feel this way sometimes. But hey that's life I guess. Keep 'em comming.

    Much love and respect
    Poetic Sista
     
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    Aww, baby I love this. So honest, so pure, so raw and so pretty. I feel you madly. Much love and peace to you.
     
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    love the way you
    spewed forth these
    raw emotions...
    without hesitation...
    revealing those questions
    many of us are often too
    afraid to speak of...

    You are a "Brave Poet"...

    Wonderful peace!
    Keep up the good work sister!
     
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    You expressed yourself wonderfully. In fact I call this the one step forward, two steps back shuffle. In time your feet will keep moving forward enough so that you will actually feel the accomplishment. I felt your words here, as i know you felt a poetic release. Keep writing.
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    lilcherry76

    Venting...expressing yourself through writing is a beautiful thing. One day you'll look back on this...when you're much stronger...and say, I wrote that? Was that how I was feeling then? :lol: It's one way to realize the power of GOD.

    :thanks: for sharing this personal moment...the thoughts of your minds...with us.

    :toast:
     
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