Black Poetry : Thoughts Of You

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Hiclass_female, Nov 17, 2003.

  1. Hiclass_female

    Hiclass_female Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Constantly comparing others to you
    my thoughts are hooked on you
    wanting to be with you
    but there's nothing I can do
    I feel like I'm in a bottle of glue
    stuck in one spot
    I really like you alot
    random conversations of you feeling the same way
    maybe something will come of it one day
    hopefully soon
    B4 my day of doom
    my time would have been a total waste
    if I didn't get to hold you at my own pace
    or see your face
    or give you a taste
    of my love that can't be erased
    and can't be replaced
    what is it going to take
    for you to understand
    I want you to be my man?
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nicely posed...
     
  3. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If he didn't get the hint in your random convos, then you gotta put it out in plain.
     
  4. alter

    alter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that's what i'm talkin about..sometimes you just gotta come straight up with it, don't you? hard-headed knuckleheadz that we men be, can't see the truth despite the many hints...i like the way you expressed that frustration with this piece..the emotion really came through, which speaks to your communicating ability as well as the skill to get your point across in a way that isn't overbearing.
     
  5. Hiclass_female

    Hiclass_female Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks guys....glad you are feeling it!
     
  6. sarcasm4eva

    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is really tyte. ive been there. u have to make him understand that u want him to b ur man.lol. u know guys arent all there 1/2 the time anyways.lol.good luck. much love :)
     
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