Quiet Poetry Lounge : Thoughts Of Love To Entertain

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  1. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey yall this vibed my brain after readin "a child called it" by Dave Pelzer...i recommend the book....peace yall


    Thoughts Of Love To Entertain

    Threw me out
    But kept me still
    Cared for me
    When i was ill
    Though confused
    I felt ordained

    that thoughts of love was entertained

    Disciplined me
    Spoiled me rotten
    Scapegoat memories
    Not forgotten
    Tho im wise
    It’s you i blame

    When thoughts of love aren’t entertained

    Flames of Words
    to burn my soul
    kept my essence
    feeling cold
    soon I felt
    comfort in pain

    since thoughts of love weren’t entertained

    from sweet remarks
    to devil glares
    made my heart
    feel unawares
    hate me love me
    make your claim

    so thoughts of love can entertain

    Puzzle Puzzle
    in my life
    family joys
    that turn to strife
    Forgiveness
    Forgiveness
    plagues my brain

    “let thoughts of love be entertained”

    But what should I
    forgive them for
    I was more a nothing
    than adored
    see my future
    hope shall reign

    and thoughts of love will entertain.

    © 2005

    word from Mz.Soull aka prizefighter16
     
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    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice poem and nice flow!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte drop well felt and smooth
     
  4. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks fam


    Wisdom7...thanks for readin the work and commentin...appreciate it....keep the flow goin....

    Rich...thanks brutha, for readin the work...thats exactly how i wanted it to come out as...smooth...

    peace and love


    keep the flow goin
    mz.soull aka prizefighter16
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tru dat sis..........and it did just that flow head .
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So many ways to think about love, both realized, and not. You flowed so thoroughly with this, leaving no stone unturned. Wonderful piece.
     
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