Quiet Poetry Lounge : Thoughts Cascading...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Dec 17, 2004.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thoughts
    cascading
    rolling
    onto paper
    strolling
    sifting
    like hour glasses
    granules of sand
    loves moment passes
    as I take each hand
    slowly touching his skin
    like a feather, setting
    their course, inching
    closer, purposely getting
    beyond the small of his back
    caressing and playfully squeezing
    painstakingly tracing his....
    heading deeply south down under
    I discover a lost treasure, slowing my pace
    contemplating inserting that key...
    Yes, verses of love flowing all over the place
    as I allow these thoughts to breathe
    cascading
    rolling onto to paper
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nice flow i like how it was pose'd flow on sis...
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Trying to get my flow on, one step at a time...Thank you Rich.
     
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    Gently and beautifully, my sis. This is nice.
     
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    nice flowing like the way it laid....angel
     
  6. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you gempis, trying to get the words rolling, appreciated.
    Your response is appreciated blkangel, thank you.
     
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    *whew* :weird:
    (Somebody, get me fan...cuz it's hot in here)

    I love the way you have the ability to write
    a heated flow with such calm and ease...
    as if you were just speaking of the weather...
    so much class and sophistication...

    Nice, Very, Very nice indeed! :welldone:
     
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    info-moetry STAFF STAFF

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    "versus of love flowing all over the place"...........u ain't never lied

    beautiful!
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    free falling feeling flow watz...very nice..
    love your constant playing with rhythms and form
     
  10. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You know sage, I wasn't sure about this piece, guess you never know how others will view it. I suppose the way this one flowed is due to my somewhat dry wit. Thanks a million sage.
    Thank you info-moetry, I appreciate your kind response poet.
    Yes this one was a bit different. Glad you liked it deepy, thank you.
     
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