Black Poetry : those were the days

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by tzevi1278, Mar 24, 2005.

  1. tzevi1278

    tzevi1278 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I knocked three times, paused . . . then another,
    she knocked back twice, and I knew to duck for cover.
    Cause two knocks meant to watch out for her mother,
    she was leaving soon, and I didn’t wanna be discovered.
    The car pulled out, and as soon as she left the block,
    I ran around to the door, cause now I was on the clock.
    37 minutes and 20 seconds til her pops came,
    we both knew the deal, cause I was there to do the [email protected] thang.
    Picked her body up and laid her gently on the bed frame,
    she told me missionary cause she like to see my dreads hang.
    Those sexy @ss gym shorts, clinging to her structure
    seem to dampen each and every single time that I touched her.
    Relieved her of the moist garbs, and snapped the t1tty strap,
    hoping that she’d let me tap that kitty from the back.
    Spread them thick track bred legs
    til they were adjacent to her head,
    “please take it easy” was the statement that she said.
    So I played along the slit until it was wet enough to tread.
    Pushed in the applehead and I beat it til it bled,
    but don’t get the wrong idea, I took it easy like she pled.
    Blood all on the sheets
    yeah, now this is perfect timing,
    10 minutes left and I had to break the hymen.
    I told her I was sorry as we cleaned up the mess,
    she said that it was cool and that I didn’t need to stress.
    “But look at all this mess, I wasn’t pushing all that hard”
    “well, you’re bigger than the dude to whom I handed in my V-card”
    Then a car pulled in the front yard,
    totally caught me off guard,
    standing there shook to death, looking like a retard.
    She told me daddy don’t play and that I should go the back way,
    and I better make it quick if I don’t wanna see the mac spray.
    So I’m running up the block in my boxers and some white socks,
    hoping that I don’t get stopped by a fu%king white cop.
    Or anyone for that matter, 15 and growing quick,
    just a young boy doing grown man sh1t.



    Copyright 2005
    © Ramarla D. Rozier
    Kiastar inc. Krate Creations publishing
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done a great creational flow
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Liked the way you took us back in the day, very descriptive piece, write some more please.
     
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    Brutha...you are on fire

    All I can say is...:bowdown: Whoa
    Can't wait for the next episode...:devil:
    Keep doin' the [email protected] thang Poet !!!

    Akilah
    :book:
     
  5. Nisa

    Nisa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wooooooooweee...i loved that ..nice @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@
     
  6. Lynne'

    Lynne' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    haha...dats kinda funny. I was feeling this whole piece...i love poems that tell a story
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i agree with lynne...this was funny as he l l i liked this
     
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