Black Poetry : Those eyes

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by twision, Apr 9, 2004.

  1. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Today was Spring
    But it felt like Autumn
    Around me
    Colors danced
    Or maybe it was those eyes...

    Eyes
    Clearly defined
    Green
    Like Granny Smith apples
    Making me salivate
    Anticipate
    Relax and almost gyrate....

    Perfect eyes
    Brows covering them perfectly
    Lashes just the right length
    Covering
    A beautiful smile
    Like hot fudge on vanilla ice cream

    I admired those eyes
    Got lost in those eyes
    Buried myself in those eyes
    Lusted after those eyes
    Lost myself in a dream
    A fantasy
    A moment
    A sin
    An urge......

    Those eyes touched me
    Carressed my soul
    Commanded my attraction
    Holding me
    Even now
    Those eyes
    Those eyes
    What was the power
    Behind those eyes?
     
  2. PurpleMoons

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    Oooh! I seen a pair of eyes
    that looked just like those!
    That was real nice!
    Loved it!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Those eyes can draw us in, can't they? This piece made me smile, nicely done.
     
  4. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    uh oh lovin this piece them eyes was like magnets huh?lol I'm just playin Like it a lot
     
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    Mmmm!
    Them are some nice eyes!
    I have seen some like that.
    This has my eyes smiling!
     
  6. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice

    Yes
    this was a nice piece Twision
    So much beauty the eyes can see...and so much beauty can be seen by lQQking in one's eyes.
    You spoke this well.
    I'm diggin it "T"
    Nita
    :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was deep....I was feelin' it....much love and a box of kool-aid for this piece
     
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    Tight as usual twision. Likes da flow.
     
  10. angelicsage

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    you keep writing like this...
    and we're all gonna end up
    being "Twision Junkies"...

    seriously...this was so captivating...
    for it is through the eyes...that
    the truth and beauty of the soul is seen...

    Nice flow!
     
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