Black Poetry : Those around you can see

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by HODEE, Sep 14, 2008.

  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Those around you can see
    Some will ask many will know

    The light you release
    It is life
    In a smile
    In a word

    Each day
    Take a moment
    It doesn’t take money
    To make change in the world

    Those in power
    They corrupt things
    The citizens sleep

    I look around and wonder
    This is scary to me

    No one is reacting
    They act happy
    Down deep they are not

    It just seems
    They are breathing
    Living like clay robots

    Taking lives
    Stealing dreams
    Shattering thoughts

    They don't cry when
    Your love one dies
    No changes
    No difference
    In what they do
    Give a
    Loud outcry

    STOP THE WORLD

    I want to get off.
    The ride is nauseating
    This ride
    Is no fun
    It hurts?

    When you feel alone
    Know you’re not by yourself
    I am here

    Those around you can see​
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We can't stop the world and get off, but we do want/need to flee from the ..."Whirl" we're in!!

    I can feel your pain through it all, great piece poet.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Those around you can see, although some will pretend to turn a blind eye to it. Thank goodness for those who will act upon what they see. Time to get real, I hear ya, speak on it Hodee.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    so often one do see yet looks the other way while we all want to get off this spin
    tyte flow i feel ya big time
     
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    I know what you mean when you say you wanna get off the ride.
    Its definitely nauseating at times but survivors are just that because they stick through it
    Thats what we do brotha... we survive.
    :grouphug:
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Definitely...

    feeling your expression!

    The world we live in seems to get more terrible as each day passes and more and more people's vision and heart become more and more insensitive. Many of those around us can see, but the problem lies in... they can't feel us. There are many of us who give up and give in to different methods of escape, drugs, the streets, the internet and to the other side.

    But it is the few who are like the expression in your words ,

    "The light you release
    It is life
    In a smile
    In a word

    Each day
    Take a moment
    It doesn’t take money
    To make change in the world"

    that make a definite difference for the good in this world.

    I can feel by this piece... you are one of those who can feel.

    Thanks for sharing

    Coco
     
  7. Clyde C Coger Jr

    Clyde C Coger Jr going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    In the Spirit of Sankofa!

    HODEE,
    :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown:

    Agree with all posters, exceptional piece!
     
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