Black Poetry : this place

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by bahati, Jul 3, 2003.

  1. bahati

    bahati Active Member MEMBER

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    rotten place
    spoiled
    in disgrace
    ramshackle illusions
    disillusioned
    let darkness reign
    remote wasteland
    isolated desert
    not a single form of being
    no flow of blood
    motion?
    emotions even?
    banned constantly
    - standstill -
    a vaccuum
    inhale? exhale?
    without air?
    my heart
    this place
    after YOU left
     
  2. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa! Deep peace.

    I enjoy your art.
    Thank you for sharing.


    feelin' it souldeep
    Coco :heart:
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice scribe...deep...
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice piece of work here. I was looking for my water bottle. Pictures of that isolated desert left me thirsty. I felt lost in the wilderness. The emptiness your expressing in this piece. Heart felt.

    I hear a loss of connection, when couples break.. you also lose some of your common friends.
     
  5. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ffffffffaaaaaaaaaaaaaannnnnnnnnntastic! this was a very nice piece. I look forward to seeing more
     
  6. bahati

    bahati Active Member MEMBER

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    thanx 4 ya luv. welcome foxy :)
     
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    nice flow..this is so deep..nice piece
    Peace
     
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