Black Poetry : this morning

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Mar 11, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    sharp pangs of hurt unknown ...fear
    push deep - force liquid pools
    not understanding what is it....
    strange feeling churning inside
    blood moving through veins
    muscles restless stirring
    not understanding what it is
    and
    this morning
    this nokiss/kiss, no warmth/sun, no smile no giving
    alien form i thought i knew - moved away
    "dont you want" - no
    "do you need" - no
    the phone...and others need:
    will you - "I'll"
    can you -"try"
    please - "i'll try"
    stomach rumbling
    bubbles bursting inside
    sharp pangs bringing liquid pools of water flowing tears
    sudden jolt
    of what is it
    what it is..what is it
    this morning?
     
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    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it's the morning of pain,
    when one must do.
    the thing they must,
    to get through.
    whether it be the day,
    or the afternoon hour.
    in the morning of pain,
    is when one consumes their power.................(loved it flow on) :spin:
     
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    deepy, this was moving
    you could feel the sorrow
    and grief...bleeding through
    each stanza...hmmm
    I'm feeling this...
     
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    right

    feelin the pain...love the way you brought this one... :wink:
     
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    The phrases you chose to pen here described pain so well, I could almost feel it.
     
  6. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    lilcherry76
    angelicsage
    nita
    watzinaname
    4 corners of the earth...twirling and the sun rose
    to a good morning...thanks to you...
    you help in my continuance...
    thank you...glad you felt......something....
     
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    Ujima Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful!

    Stay focused,

    Ujima
     
  8. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i appreciate you Ujima and your words...
    thanks...
     
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    Poet you certainly did capture that feeling, that ache, that sometimes catches one unaware in the morning. Well written flow.
     
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    This is a great piece.

    this nokiss/kiss, no warmth/sun, no smile no giving
    alien form i thought i knew - moved away
    "dont you want" - no
    "do you need" - no
    the phone...and others need:
    will you - "I'll"
    can you -"try"
    please - "i'll try"


    Love that can't say. Won't even say. " I'll Try"
    Like a light switch love. On and Off. Got me doing it now.
    I am not a light switch lover. So maybe we need to part. To save the love. We built and know. And the essence of each others heart.
     
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