Quiet Poetry Lounge : This is not a love poem

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  1. THA HOOKUPMAN

    THA HOOKUPMAN Banned MEMBER

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    :new: :nono: This is not a love poem :nono:

    nope yawl it aint!

    cause love don't live here anymore
    see I've closed the doors on confusion and frustration
    cause the lack of concentration had me contemplating
    these irrational thoughts of homicide
    cause her ***
    cheated and lied

    I cried enough tears to fill the Atlantic Ocean
    it was her lack of devotion
    that soon gave me the notion
    that this relationship was lost at sea

    and I could not see the reality of the situation
    cause I thought we had a foundation built on love and trust ...right!!!

    so honesty became my worst enemy
    And I remember when we first made encounters

    we conversed and I became immensely immersed
    by the way your loins of venus aligned perfectly with my spaceship pluto
    and it seemed as though nothing could come between us
    or contain us until you gave me your anus to kiss

    this twist of fate left me fatally wounded in my coronary artery
    and the part of me that allowed me to procreate love from inside died
    And from that day forward I bent over backwards
    and fell to my knees in order to please
    you and falsate your deflating ego

    Just so you could go and tell a friend
    and spend hours on end
    premeditating metaphors in your head,
    so you could put words in my mouth,
    so that I only spoke your language
    And it's strange that this love thing can feel so good yet hurt so bad,

    but I had to put love out my house cause I caught love stealing my emotions
    and dealing my feelings in the street and pimping my pride like some two dollar ***
    And I couldn't take it nomore
    so I kicked love to the curb,
    hung a do not disturb sign on my heart and padlocked the door

    So this is not a love poem cause love don't live here anymore
    and though my heart saw right through your lies with x-ray vision
    I made the conscious decision to forsake my religion for the sake of your happiness
    And after this you treated me like I didn't exist
    like my body had just committed a crime
    and you sentenced my body to loving you for life without the possibility of parole

    I lost control
    and my mind and soul became wide open to you like 7-11
    Twenty- four hours a day, seven days a week
    And in that weakened state of mind
    you diluted my delusions with your ***** solutions
    and random acts of kindness
    It was my blindness to the situation
    that allowed your manipulation and dictation to be less apparent
    So I stood transparent at the fork in the road
    looking for the right path to love
    so I chose the road not taken,
    mistaken your lust for love but instead of truths I found deception
    And my perceptions became congested
    as I manifested into a figment of your imagination
    dramatized by your well-written scenario

    So this is not a love poem cause love don't live here anymore
    and I don't know where love is right now
    or when love's coming back for the rest of it's confusion and distress
    Cause when love left here love left no forwarding address

    this is not a love poem :nono:


    wrote this when i was going thru divorce ...i know some body out there felt this at one time or is feeling this way now....
    smile ..love is on the way again poets... brotha hookup
     
  2. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :nono: My brother i was here not 2 long ago but I found that love is where you least expect and it shall move in when it's time...LOL
    This joing reminds me of the song...Dap'z my brother! :smokin:
     
  3. angelicsage

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    :crying: nope, smh...this definitely ain't no love poem
    but it is a heart wrenching display of pain, disappointment,anger
    and brokeness of the heart...

    there are so many imitations of love in this world...
    consider it a blessing to have lost something that could never complete you
    you are now open to experience love, be loved, give love and receive..."real" love at heights to which one can yet to begin to fathom...

    One thing is certain though...once you've experienced the imitator...
    meeting love and knowing that it is truly love is easy...and you'll know it
    beyond the shadow of a doubt... :wink: …you’ll know it, you’ll know it... :sand:


    This poem touched me...these words are too...my words
    Sensational piece...@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@

    Encore...
    Sage
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You captured, so well, what it is to feel so totally unappreciated and unloved despite all we do to sense merely a morsel of true feeling and commitment. Yes, I know how it feels, and it feels like you're dying inside. Emotively written.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow! great creativity and master piece
     
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    Yes it's a "Masterpiece" because that road that you once took is so over crowded...by far.
    I loved the poem very much, it's awesome to say the lease. thanks for letting us step inside of you.
     
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    Felt every word brotha. very stirring and heart wrenching. I'm not going thru a divorce, or ever been married, but I've lost that battle w/love as well. my "do not disturb" sign and lock are in full effect at the moment :bye: thank u for sharing!


     
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    wow that was fire, i felt the raw emotion right thru my computer screen. well done
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    HOOKUPMAN DID IT AGAIN !!!!!!!!
     
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