Black Poetry : This Is Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by renee31127, Nov 11, 2003.

  1. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    She knows not what she wants
    But can clearly see what she lacks
    She feels unloved
    Dreams shattered
    Will broken
    She says she won’t apologize for who she has become
    A victim of circumstances beyond her control
    Trying to pick up the pieces of what’s left of her life
    Not knowing where to start
    Or when it will end
    Emotionally violated
    Physically pillaged
    Her innocence snatched away
    Beaten down by the world
    Left for dead
    Every time she felt lonely it killed her a little more inside
    Till she unrecognizable
    To even herself
    She’s left with nothing
    A replica of her former identity
    He’s no longer home to her
    Because he’s the one who destroyed her
    No longer her inspiration
    But the cause of her frustration
    She’s run out of tears
    But wouldn’t shed another even if she could
    There she stands alone
    But stronger than she ever thought possible
    No more empty promises
    No more heartache
    No more
    This is what I have become
    Stripped down to my soul
    But still standing
    Though slightly broken
    Who isn’t
    A work in progress
    But I’m getting there
    This is me
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If there's one thing I know...is that when a woman is down
    and seemingly at her lowest...she's at her strongest...
    it's at that time that we can hear that inner voice...clearly
    If it hasn't killed us...it just made us stronger...and it better look
    out because we jump up swinging...taking everything that
    was stolen..."back by force"...these aren't just my thoughts
    but it's also in the words of the divine...words I live by...


    Loved the way you came with this...Keep it flowin "Renee"
    Bravo Girl!
     
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    indeed...keep on workin dat pen..
    love the flow :angel1:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    da pen say it all here i feel u though
     
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    so true
    as Sister Sage pose it
    you are indeed
    at your strongest poet
    much love to you
    Peace
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You're stronger than you know. If you were weak you would have disappeared into yourself long ago. Keep writing.
     
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    one's strengths rise to the top in times of hardship. this is a profound piece, renee.
     
  8. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    angelicsage- If I'm getting love from my favorite poet I must be doing something right. I am truely honored by your words, they mean a lot.

    mzblkangel- You always show love, thank you so much.

    $$RICH$$- You're the man, what else can I say

    Bluewater - Much love to you as well, and a big :thanks:

    watzinaname - I never thought of it that way, but it is so true, and very encouraging. Thank you.

    gempis- I enjoy you so much :heart: thank you thank you thank you.
     
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    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    keep move'n in da right direction...
    you'll get there...no doubt
    tyte
    peace
    khasm