Black Poetry : this chance

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by toylin, Aug 23, 2004.

  1. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    (I found my Afro pick y'all! LOL........)


    i used to want to grow up
    to be just like you
    all apple pie sugar and spice
    and happy endings too
    but then one day
    i saw you through the mirror
    the looking glass reflected
    a truth i didn't want to see
    so here i am
    struggling
    fighting you
    oh Amerika
    how could you make me feel
    so Black and blue
    watching things change around me
    watching blood flow
    in the streets
    watching alley ways become home
    to a little thing called Shame
    my afro wild
    rings on my toes
    see Jane run
    but Tyriq get run
    down that lonely railroad
    what does it matter
    how many times a day
    i pray?
    want to label all unknown
    the enemy
    because things you cannot say
    in their tongue
    the ink you see
    relaxes me
    i bought life into this world
    you owe me
    for my shattered dreams
    but your bounced check
    was marked
    "paid in full"



    to be continued....... i think......
     
  2. MrBlak

    MrBlak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    please do continue.....

    I enjoyed it to this point
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow da afro let down
    felt all dis here flow pt.2 please
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yep, they claim to owe us nothing, diggin this vibe, do continue poet.
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was tight looking for part 2...QQ
     
  6. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cool, glad y'all liked it.... I was afriad this was, uh, militant, but ya know..... When I get that feeling again, I'll be sure to fnish it...
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh girl you gotta continue this, cause it's 100 percent dope! My, my, I enjoyed this.
     
  8. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, Gempis. Now all I need is a little inspiration.....
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice Rhythmic Flow...
    you gotta finish this sis...
    we're on the edge of our seats...
     
  10. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gurlllllllll this was clean i was diggin this one like :read: c'mon hurry up already :D lol
     
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