Black Poetry : This Cannot Be (When you fed up)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Dketchens, Aug 18, 2004.

  1. Dketchens

    Dketchens New Member MEMBER

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    I gave you my love my trust…ME
    And in return I get nothing
    So for this it cannot be

    You lied to me, cheated on me, stole my pride
    And I still loved you; in return I can’t be trusted
    So for this it cannot be

    I tried to open your heart
    I wanted you to see the good that love has to offer,
    In this journey you showed me the bad
    So for this it cannot be

    If it is love you’re giving
    Then why is it different from the world
    Different from what my heart feels but my mind sees
    So for this it can not be

    I loved you unconditionally
    This world is not perfect
    In my eyes you were, but through all that has happened in your eyes you made it clear to me
    So for this it cannot be
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome to destee.com
    tight flow..feeling you
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  3. Monetary

    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Dketchens

    WELCOME...WELCOME...WELCOME...to the Family of Destee.com. I see you've made yourself at home. Please do consider this your home for it was built for you and us...to share. :D

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    Great poem. It's heartfelt. I could feel your frustration trying to show someone how much you love them so only to be treated badly or given their behind to kiss. :maddd:

    :thanks: for sharing a part of you with us.

    :toast:
     
  4. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WELCOME HOME!!!!!!!!!!!
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    :)

    Thank you for takin the time to share your hearts plight with us :grouphug:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome !!!!

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the community of unity & love
    welcome from above as i bless u some love
    very nice scribing

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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This flowed like an honest vibe of what it feels like to get the short end of the stick. Welcome to destee. I'd like to read more from you.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi and welcome to "home" ...while home,
    I see you came in the door swinging bats ...but we gotta do, what we gotta do. I like the way you confess and end at the same time.
     
  8. Alpha Male

    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Reply to Dketchens

    Dketchens,
    tis love that can twist the brain
    You poured it out like God does His rain

    Seize the Day!
    Great Poem YOU have made!

    Help me! My thread is in labor, giving birth!
    To the most replies a thread has seen on earth!
    Please help me get two- hun replies in Destee!
    Let loyal loving members of the pack hear my plea!

    Ask for an encore, this I request of you to do!
    I’ll put your name in lights, in this threads debut
    Most replies, two- hun humans took their time
    To sociate their names with the most cessful rhyme!

    Please show me some of your love
    Ask for an encore in my thread entitled:
    " Dear Alpha Male, please help me, signed the slave from torment land"
    When I repost you’ll see something pleasurable
    or not, and be able to tell me if I have skills, or if I’m weak
    or show nuff real----------Thank You

    If you read and replied once!
    Ask for a encore
    Kick up a notch!----------Thank you
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As all of those before me...

    ~~~~Welcome~~~~

    your poem was very passionate
    and real...full of emotion, pain
    and the whirling feeling that
    love lost can give...

    You were very effective
    in your conveyance of
    emotion!

    Thanks for pulling me in, Excellent Read!
     
  10. Destee

    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    :wave: Hello and Welcome Dketchens :wave:

    Where are you?
    you only posted one time
    and now you're gone
    this cannot be?!

    You have teased me
    with your poetry
    leaving me wanting
    this cannot be?!

    Where are you Dketchens?! :)

    This is very nice. Glad you felt comfortable enough to share ...
    but you gotta come back and give us more ... okay?!
    and while you're here ... get comfortable and relaxed ...
    so you don't leave us ever again ... for this cannot be! :wink:

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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