Black Poetry : this beating thing...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by alyce, Mar 28, 2001.

  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    …I just reacted when I saw
    the blood pouring out ~ so I stuck my finger
    in the wound to make it stop …
    so the beating thing inside wouldn’t

    …I don’t remember what happened, really
    just felt a thud, knocking me off balance
    didn’t hurt at first,
    didn’t even know I’d been hit
    until I looked down and saw the
    bleeding...

    ...MY blood~~ warm, red, seeping from my
    love~well...
    (but, I'd forgotten: it's a bottomless place)

    see...I was worried because I
    didn’t want to lose a drop of
    love…thinking it couldn’t be
    replaced once tainted by the air…

    so

    I clasped my hands to my chest,
    in an attempt to hold it in,
    keep my love inside, and stifle
    some of the pain...

    ... then I realized it was
    all right to let go & just let
    it go head on & flow

    ~because hearts were meant
    to bleed for those we love,
    sometimes~


    :heart: 2 :heart:


    Alyce, 2001
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    NOW ALYCE IN MY MIND I KNOW
    BUT TODAY U SHOWED ME SO
    NOW I FEEL NEW
    I LOVE THE HEART 2 HEART THANG!
    THANK U FOR YA WORDS OF WISDOM
     
  3. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Absolutely Brilliant!!!

    Let it flow baby girl!!! im diggin this one hea Alyce! Hella creative concept... excellent visuals and verbage!

    Madd Respect
    Reas
     
  4. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ms A...

    oh my sistah!! i wanna be just
    like you when i grow up!! :jumping:

    this was tyght... & a lesson for
    the masses... especially us romantics...

    "~because hearts were meant
    to bleed for those we love,
    sometimes~"


    thanks for sharing this...

    AlwaysLove...
    Sunshyne~
     
  5. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alyce! This is my kind of vibe. Deep, real, love, classic! This was heavy yet light, pain and joy wrapped into a well scribed piece. Go on girl...do yo' thang!

    one love, blak
     
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    ooohhhhh Alyce
    you know i love this
    gurl ... how do you do the thangz you do!
    i'm impressed ... again

    beautiful beautiful flow Sis

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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    Alyce,

    Very passionate and deep flow!!!

    :heart:felt most def!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
  8. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Flow on sister, this was deep!!!!!!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alyce's scribes tend to take me through a range of emotions. In this one, first I felt pain, but then I smiled with hope. :) What can be said about this poetic mastermind?
     
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    Wow love the metaphor of this right here and the advice. again I say wow poet
     
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