Black Poetry : things never change

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Flyy baby luv, Oct 21, 2004.

  1. Flyy baby luv

    Flyy baby luv Member MEMBER

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    The rain drops from my eyes pour like a broken faucett,
    The thunder in your voice hurts my mind as I try to process
    the words you say through my ponding brain.
    My heart pinches from the lightning streaking things you say
    Do you mean to hurt me this way?

    The love I feel for you is strong enough to accept the emotional torture
    you put me through,
    my body through.
    The Ups and Downs we ride to geather
    how does my pain become your pleasure?
    or is my pain my own pleasure?

    As my hurts and pains and love jion from what you have put me in to go through.
    I explode and reach my natural high,
    when yoou reach down, kiss me and hold me,
    and love me now things are fine
    until the next day
    When they're back the same.
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    emotional peice
    posed well
    very nice write
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very deep the sunshine is near
    and comfort of cares forth coming
    behold and hold on dry ya eyes
    i feel u speaking today
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That rollercoaster of pain, you described this well. And with these lines:
    The Ups and Downs we ride to geather
    how does my pain become your pleasure?
    or is my pain my own pleasure?
    You gave me something extra to ponder, about what we sometimes do to ourselves. Well written piece.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hug to you :grouphug:
    your flow s say so much
    speaking of the love
    feeling the pain
    yeah .. keep your flow coming
    feeling how you pours so much on this canvas
    peace and love

    Blue:heart:
     
  6. j holla

    j holla New Member MEMBER

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    peace
    I'm feeling this hurtful poem...and I like the line "How does my pain become your pleasure" as to some people love is a game that they are trying to break wide open. Thanks for sharing...
     
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