Black Poetry : Things Fall Apart

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  1. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh say can you see
    the darkness in my heart
    from where hope has long fled
    and a fleet of soldiers
    takes its place

    Oh say can you see
    what they have done to me
    my blood runs thick
    and deep
    and my eyes can no longer
    weep

    in the rockets red glare
    i bow my head in despair
    the children are dying
    and no one sems
    to care
     
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    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Very Nice :sand:
    Good poem

    Monad.poetress
     
  3. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    re:

    Thank you.

    Toya
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    twist affect on life
    well felt here and reality
    tyte drop
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    More attention paid to the cost of oil than the cost of lives, you brought this straight to the point. Well done.
     
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    very nicely posed wit a reality
    check
    nice drop
    :angel1:
     
  7. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, everyone!
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    love the correlation
    of the star spangled
    banner and the tone
    which reflects the state
    or our country...

    Lot's of truth and originality

    Great read!
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    toylin,
    Excellent social commentary
    Tribute to when the caring ones who are just and intelligent take charge....

    We can't help but see
    Ugliness bigger than life
    The caring struggling to break free
    to end the senseless strife
    the sun shines as it rains, you see
    and the devil beats his wife......


    Peace and Blessings
     
  10. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I thought it was time to bring this one back to the top.. Thanks to daroc and 1poetsought, especially, for reminding me of this one.....
     
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