Black Poetry : Things Change(Ode to autumn and life)

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  1. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I looked in the autumn sky
    Felt the breezes
    Heeding the indication of change
    Thinking of you, you, and you......

    Moods that changed
    Lifestyles that changed
    Communication habits that changed
    Love expressed that simply...changed!

    Somehow
    Unaware
    I got caught in the crux
    Of predictability
    Maybe complacency
    Wanting things to stay the same
    Forever
    Not realizing
    Things,
    People,
    Attitudes,
    And even God given seasons

    CHANGE!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    EVERYDAY A NEW CHANGE IN PEOPLE , PLACES AND THINGS
    LIKE COMMON LAW .............THIS ONE LAY ON MY MIND !
     
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    To every thing there is a season, as long as one lives and breathes there will be change. Thought provoking drop, well written poet.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    "somehow, unaware i got caught in the cruz of predictability, maybe complacency"
    those lines just stopped me and made me see me...nice flow...
     
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    Simple, clear and deep. Love the truth here. Where you been, twision? Great to read you again.
     
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    First allow me to say how "EXCITED" I am to see you back on the board...
    and how much you've been sorely missed...
    and while I'm at it..."don't you go taking such a long haitus again"...shoo
    had to get that in...

    now...about the poetry... :coffee:
    what can I say that I haven't said
    a million times before in all your other works

    ...you're just awesome

    Love your style, flow, and message...
    I always know I'm in for something special
    and this piece was no less...than before

    Still exceeding my expections...
    I loved it...down to the last beautiful vowel
    Sage
     
  7. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    your piece really drew me in. things change, people change, life changes no matter how much me don't want them too. But i think God likes change. Why else would we go through so many
     
  8. rasheed

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    twision,

    i enjoyed your poem and message....
    Change is our challenge
    if we can deal with change effectively
    we have mastered a great deal of this realm....

    Peace and Blessings
     
  9. Bluewater

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    Hi twision
    Very soothing flow poet
    I was taken in just from your
    1st stanza so much in our
    lives changes as times just
    keep on ticking, wishing at times
    things can stay the same, and
    at times hoping for change
    This is just an awesome poem
    Yes ! :)

    Peace
     
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