Black Poetry : they think

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by the_story, Apr 15, 2004.

  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she felt that the Fates would decieve her...
    she would walk the dirty muddy grounds...
    looking, feeling....
    she nodded toward the beggar...

    (beggars and theives)
    "Can u spare some change ma'am?"
    ****...
    she didn't know what it felt like
    to crouch on knees...
    a dereliction to humanity...
    or at least thats what they think...

    when she saw these things....
    vile theives that stalked the night shadows
    they were to shamefull to step into the light
    or at least thats what they think...

    (slave)
    my back burns...
    blisters...reach into my skin....
    i was a desolate...
    will i be free in the grave?
    will God hold my quivering mass of a soul?
    and say "I love u?"
    maybe...

    ("freeman")
    he would expund on others artificial intelligence...
    in order to get ahead...
    he sold his soul to the devil...
    he forgot where he came from...
    maybe it was lost in a crack of his brain...
    or maybe it was never there...

    (heart broken)

    the way he crushed my heart against his fingers
    was cruel and butal
    his fingers scorched my soul...
    his touch was the only thing keeping me alive
    yet killing me....






    to be continued...

    (sorry about this yall i have a VER SEVERE CASE OF WRITERS BLOCK)

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  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Writer's block?...I suggest that you block that 'writer's block and finish this story....I love where this story is going...and I want to finish reading it...so get busy :)
    on the real: ALL good writer's get this block so that in itself says a lot about you...
    It says to me that you are a master of your work...and that's real
    and I luv you for the person that you are...
    now get back to my story!!!! :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was awesome the block removed flow on continue lil sis...
     
  4. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol..u know im on it queen...ima get back to ya on this...

    hheeyyy richness...u know ima finish it...
    :heart:
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Another A-ONE drop!!!!
     
  6. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks one...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey, the story, I was into this, can't wait for more.
     
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    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My Giiiiirl that was just outstanding......I want more please you on ya way to the top lil sis :teach: :tongue:
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol..thanks fo the love sistah...i'm getting there....
    :heart:
    -story