Black Poetry : They Decided to Meet on an Island, Revisited

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The two hadn't ventured
    off to their world of eminence
    in months, so the two decided
    it was high time to do more than remanence.
    To a more familiar island, they
    traveled to this time...
    With crowded streets, eclectic people,
    and artsy venues, sublime.
    She entered the coffeehouse
    looking for him through the crowd.
    There he was, looking so fine
    it was hard not to utter his name out loud.
    She wanted to surprise him, and she did,
    covering his eyes, and saying guess who?
    With a smirk he said with a voice like that,
    who could it be baby, but you?
    He took her hand as she sat down.
    Skin so soft, he missed her so.
    Immersed in her eyes, he could see her earthy
    soul, while the candlelight danced within to and fro.
    As the jazz vibe filled the room, he bobbed
    his head, feeling the groove of her
    entwined with the sax, just jammin. He thought
    of other rendezvous they had, and the way they were....
    She sipped a little wine, and smiled at him
    when he looks at her this way, it just captures her.
    Every note the sax is playing, reminds her of the last
    time, filled with each other's hearts in a cavern by the sea.
    He put down his glass, and said he found a room
    with a perfect view of Lady Liberty.
    He said it was a peaceful space to find
    a momentary hide away in this sleepless city.
    Shall we investigate further? he asked. She didn't
    hesitate to say yes. Her interest would always peak.
    He was the calm in her rainstorm, and
    the unique refuge she'd always seek.


    Part 2, in a few....
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was grand two meeting in a place of aweeeeeee!
    tyte frop pt.2 please flow on sis..
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Happy to know you liked this meeting of two, thank you brotha Rich. Still brewing part 2.....
     
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    W-o-w ...when two hearts meet :love: , no wrong words can be say, And every minute is always cherried ...pt. 2 is a must. I enjoy a good story, thanks.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Queent it's nice to know you consider this to be a good story. Thank you for your kind words sis.
     
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    As always, You mesmerize
    me with your word visions!

    Looking forward to p2!!!!

    Loving it!!!!!!!!
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice vision..looking for pt 2

    Peace
    Angel
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad you enjoyed this one also Purplemoons, next we'll see what happens after they leave....Thank you.
    Mzblkangel, nice to know you liked the vision, thank you.
     
  9. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    watz
    you writing a novel?...really you understand words and how to make them become visual images on the page...
     
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    Very, very nice...
    Love the imagery
    this read like a poem
    but very much like
    and intriguing novel...

    I see you flexing those skills girl!

    Loving this piece!
     
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