Black Poetry : They are us

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by GhostDog15, Feb 23, 2004.

  1. GhostDog15

    GhostDog15 Active Member MEMBER

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    Just a thing for the black history month, hard to explain what im trying to say... im learning how to be a poet, but hey this is my second peom, i know it sucks, but hey, give a brother a hand and tell me what wrong, i wanna learn yall, i wanna be a poet.

    can't think of a title for it, so im just gonna call it they are us

    They Are Us

    They Are Us

    They wanted us,
    They needed us,
    They took us,
    They shook us,
    They had us,
    They used us,
    They got rid of us,
    They hid us,
    They kid us,
    They mocked us,
    They socked us,
    They enjoyed us,
    They toyed us,
    They supported us,
    They jailed us,
    They bailed us,
    They drafted us,
    They shafted us,
    They showed us,
    They taut us,
    They fought us,
    They want us,
    They like us,
    They share us,
    They are us.


    whatcha think? ill give it a 2
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ah yes wonderful....love this dropped:jumping:
    thank you for sharing ..wow..
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Liked the way this flowed form top to bottom, keep writing.
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i liked it
    nice flowing...
    flow some more....
     
  5. Khasm13

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    it didn't suck...
    for your second poem
    this was extremely deep....keep scribe'n son
    one love
    khasm
     
  6. rasheed

    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GhostDog,
    nice write, nice flow, nice message----

    Peace and Blessings to ya........
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Keep on sweetie...your heart is in the right place :)