Black Poetry : These Feelings

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  1. unique1

    unique1 Member MEMBER

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    This poem was written after I had a really late night man bashing session with my best friend. I couldn't get to sleep so I wrote this piece for her.
    For these past couple of days,
    You haven't been calling my name
    You keep biting your lip,
    like you don't want another's name to slip.
    And I know it's random
    but it's trully bothering me.
    Seems that lately our love making
    isn't what it use to be.
    Baby tell me what's up
    I hope you still practicing manogamy.
    If not let me know, and I'll set you free,
    cause I don't want someone who desires someone other than me.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    and I'll set you free,
    cause I don't want someone who desires someone other than me.

    those last lines really did it forme...it's about loving self and for me the poem and especially that last line says that...nice and tight...short and sweet...hey" it's aw reet" (to quote Langston)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep felt and to the point
    this poem was well expressed
     
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