Black Poetry : There Is No Blue (Tribute To New Orleans)

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  1. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey guys, this poem is straight off the dome...I Hope that it makes sense to you guys....i really wrote it from the heart...cuz im praying for all the people who suffered from the storm in New Orleans...

    THERE IS NO BLUE.......

    There is no blue...
    over the horizon...
    no blue...
    only the swift plague of despair
    in the tears
    from broken eyes
    trickling down
    the broken faces.....

    What could be left?
    without the clouds...
    or the smiles...
    or the...
    hope?!

    There is still hope,
    There is still life...
    but...
    no living...?!

    The dreams
    still existing
    over those broken hills
    whisper,...

    Where's the Jazzy bebop trumpet of the sun.............?

    Too much loss to forget...
    the memorable ways of a people
    the vibrant styles of a legacy
    each legacy...
    playing a part,
    in what was,
    what is...
    what will always be
    The beautiful soul of a city

    All...
    Will...
    Remain...
    with the blessed souls
    now suffering...
    to the wait of a relative time
    ...there is too much
    of little energy left
    to linger on mistakes...
    perfection is now
    the saviour
    to foolish costs
    that allowed kings and queens to drift away

    ... with hearts that are sent out thrught the tv screen...
    There is a lesson being shouted throught the skies...
    A lesson, that should not have
    been learned this way...

    Still,
    in the midst...
    of the cold rage
    in the midst...
    of the hot silence...
    there lies over the horizon
    a whisper...
    "WHERE'S THE JAZZY BEBOP TRUMPET OF THE SUN?"

    copywritten 2005 Mz.Soull aka prizefighter16
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The style and structure of this, remembering the music and flavor of New Orleans and what it has become, was right on point. It flowed off the dome just right.
     
  3. Alpha Male

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    reply to Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16
    And it shall come to pass, that whoever shall call on the name of the Lord shall be saved (acts 2:21)

    Saved from a flood in noah's times?
    Saved from the firery brimestone in sodom and gormora?
    Saved from the flooded streets where sin exposed its breast for beads?

    There is hope in the Lord Jesus
    Let them call on Him now!

    People everywhere
    Repent and turn to God...............(acts 26:20)

    Thank you for the poem

    sincerely

    alpha male
     
  4. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Watzinaname...thank you...i was kinda worried that the poem wouldn't make all that much sense...but then again...much of what is going on doesn't make sense...so it could reflect off of that..

    AlphaMale...thank u for reading my poetry...by ur comments...i do wonder whether ur attributing the disaster on the city to daily sin that took place..

    lives were lost...that's all i kno...thanks for reading and responding..
     
  5. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Prizefighter that was beautiful! Adding that jazzy part about the sun, that did bring that New Orleans flavor. I loved it!
     
  6. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    tis a wonderful poem...
    wonderful...
    "where is that jazzy bebop trumpet of the sun"?
    I hear its long notes blowing in your poem...
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wonderful tribute to the BIG EASY

    Your set knocked me out!
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    umm, it makes alot of sense
    and vivid and powerful

    i felt it
    trust me


    DSS
     
  9. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wisdom7...thanks for readin and responding...yeah New Orleans was all over that poem...it will never be lost in my eyes

    Deepy...thanks sis for readin and respondin...Yeah...i think everyone has it in their hearts...that trumpets sound cant ever die

    1poetsought...thanks for readin brutha...im glad this twerked into ur train of thought

    Da Street So'ja...umm..thanks for feeling the poem...im glad u enjoyed it...


    yall keep the flow goin...thanks for the support yall

    Mz.Soull aka prizefighter16
     
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