Black Poetry : Then N Now...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Nov 17, 2004.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm weak for you
    I feel like I’m six feet deep into
    a grave
    On my knees like a slave
    And I crave
    Your presence like an alcoholic craves the bottle
    Can I have sip? Maybe a swallow?
    If I can get drunk off you tonight, Ill go to AA tomorrow
    Just take the lead and Ill follow
    Although I’m a natural born leader
    I’m also a natural born pleaser
    I’m talking physical as well as mental
    I know you’re hard to protect what’s gentle
    I don’t like to destroy beauty by ripping things apart
    But I’m gonna have to break your skin to get to your heart
    Love is a mystery especially when people aren’t the same
    I’m trying to get to know your mind before I know your frame
    Because I’ve been there, done that
    Sex keeps ‘em for a night, but correlation keeps ‘em coming back
    I’d rather slow down and watch love take its form
    Because there’s nothing more beautiful than watching something being born
    Tryna connect on one accord
    Looking for the richest love, but something I can afford
    With avid faith, although we have no idea what’s in store
    Babygirl walk with me through the door
    Door of love, passion, and understanding
    Starting as your friend by becoming your companion
    Can’t promise perfection
    And I can’t tell you what direction
    We’ll be going or in a month what will go down
    But I do know you had me 7 months ago and you still have me now
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow........the beauty of a single sip !
    u know i love dis at it's best tyte write
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "I’d rather slow down and watch love take its form
    Because there’s nothing more beautiful than watching something being born"
    Wow, so many beautiful lines flow through this piece. You so thoroughly describe the weakness and the craving...then and now, still strong. Flow on.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I like it...nothing more to say...
    like it alot...really nice...
    nice rhythm..nice rhyme...nice...just
    very nice
     
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    sista you done did it again :)
    eva so smooth and eva so silky :)
    it could only be yours :read:
     
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    this was great i mean i loved it...release it sis this was awesome...
    sometimes ya just need that little sip yanno....nice write

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    This line is the essence of it for me:

    'Looking for the richest love, but something I can afford'

    Seems like before, the cost was too high. Maybe it's not now? Or you're still figurin out that part. I know love is of the utmost importance to you, and you always go deep into the mental when it's goin on. The growth you've had because of love is apparent in this great piece. Good for you, girl. I think that next to your intelligence and worldly awareness, the next thing I admire about you most is your fearless heart.

    Much peace and love.
     
  8. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks yall

    I appreciate the love. And gempis, its not what you think... its just a poem. Has nothing to do with TSM. Peace n love...
     
  9. Da1whoownslife

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    this is a real nice poem
     
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    I loved this poet
    The test of time and love
    I think you hit this dead on
    Much Love Poet