Black Poetry : "... then came you "

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  1. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    love was
    a puzzle..
    a muzzle over my mouth until along came my queen
    escorted to me by the hand of the Most High
    in venusian auras
    and hues of earth and sky leading you
    to the last step to my distanced domain....
    l knelt out the open door
    everything in me was brought to the floor
    from my search to my surrender...

    three years later
    ...and each day is new
    each night with you
    is the place of my mental reservation...
    a storage of candlelit thoughts
    and much anticipation..
    house my love..
    l am your home
    for l have windows only your soul can see
    l have many doors only you hand can "key"
    l never thought l would bend to one knee...
    then came you

    then came you











    jcdlmh/ (c)
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  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Queeneth of love came just for u to love u
    dis was so sweet and divine ......wow tyte J'h
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was quite taken with this, especially the part that speaks of how, three years later, love is still as potent as ever. You are blessed. Beautiful flow.
     
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    oh this is a so romantic
    filled with love so deep from the heart
    that have indeed caught my heart
    oh so sweet are your thoughts
    what a wonderful touch to have
    produce this wonderful flow of the Art

    this is very lovely dear brother
    wonderful poetry :)

    BlueWater:heart:
     
  5. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $R,
    ...she came to me like shaq came to the heat maannn
    :D
    personal note: send $R the "escortz 2005" joynt soon!!

    watz,
    the compliments are appreciated..
    you are always on point with me

    BlueWater,
    trying to make this man crumble huh??
    thank you.

    now lemme break it down for ya' :dance3: dun style
     
  6. MzMelanie2u2

    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful...

    I have one word for this piece..."BEAUTIFUL"..absolutely beautiful. you described the type of love i long for each and everyday. I agree with $$RICH$$ that this has such a sweet feel and flow. I definately look forward to hearing more from you..Keep em comin...1
     
  7. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    words alone can not express the beauty and simplicity of your words. how woman all over destee are longing their man would say these words to them. this is so hot, she's a lucky woman.
     
  8. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    how wonderful , vulnerable and manly..
    how blessed she is...and you are
    beautiful flow...
     
  9. angelicsage

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    aaawe, this was so sweet
    the true sentiments of
    your heart poured from
    every word and what
    began as a beautiful
    waterfall is now a
    great river of passion,
    love, desire and completion...

    A true soul mating connection...

    Miss your flow...
    nice reading the flavor your infamous for...again

    As ever,
    Sage
     
  10. Ireadastory

    Ireadastory Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece was very heartfelt. It's great when a brotha knows how to tap into those true love feelings that so many brothas have but won't share. Great drop!
     
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