Black Poetry : The Water's not Hot enough

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by SwtT, Jun 5, 2003.

  1. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Scrub....Scrub....
    Add more soap...
    Scrub..Scrub....
    Soap my body up

    I feels so bad
    My head feels dizzy and I feel tired
    I hurt all over
    Like I' been beat with the green wire
    I got a bruise on my leg
    On the place where he hit me
    And I'm washin away the leaves now
    From when Mistah J got me dirty
    I even got the hard brush
    That I use to clean the tub
    Ooh Mamma gon git me!
    ..Cuz I usin her body scrub

    But it's the only thing dat I could find
    The only soap that will me make me feel better
    Mistah Johnson 'cross da street
    ..He tole' me he would make me feel better
    He kept grabbin on my legs
    Tole' me he wanted ta' play
    I tried to go inside my house
    I tole him i couldn't play
    He kept grabbin at my dress
    And then I ran but I tripped
    and den...and den...
    He took me to somewhere and made me strip

    My momma gone be so mad at me!!!
    When she fin out my dress be tore..
    Oh no what will she say...
    I think I didn't close the back door
    My coochiecoo hurt so bad
    Feel like I got bad stomach cramps
    He kept hurtin me down there....
    And he hit me with a branch
    My stuff won't stop bleedin
    Oh no I'm a bad girl
    I can't let Mamma know I'm bleeding down there..
    She'll call me a bad girl!!

    I know what I gone do...
    Im gone throw away the dress
    Put tilet paper in my panties
    To try to stop my mess
    What ever it is...
    I wonder why he was laughing so hard
    It wasn't too funny to me..
    Thats why I ran from the yard...
    Ok ok
    I gotta get outta dis shower
    I got figure out how ta hide dis
    I gotta clean out this bathroom
    I-I gotta brush my hair and wipe my scars up
    Cuz Mamm's commin home soon

    And then I gone go to sleep
    Or I'll try to
    ...He told me it was all my fault..
    He said only one to blame was you....

    I's gon forget it
    Im gone let no one know
    I know I been a bad girl
    I just got what I asked for....
     
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    this is good :toast:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the flow was sweet
    but beneath is a pain
    a stain , lost virginity
    hidden secret exposed
    lost of the beauty rose
    ripple red scars uncover
    for a notions of as lover
    what one did
    be's me falut no no !!
    dis M&%#@^ need to be caught

    WHO HAS DA RIGHTS TO AN VIRGIN !??

    crazy mixed emotions tears flow lost
    treasures forever more and they make it one's falut
    when they unsafe the beings and strip them from
    hope .............i know it's RAPE !

    that wrong that's wrong
    tell it , tell it all
    moma moma hurry home
    he strip me from my pride
    we have to try to protect our children
    our mothers our sistas from sick men like dis
    the pain is a scar forever.......................................
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    and the harsh reality is...IT HAPPENS EVERYDAY.:(...to too many of my little sistahs.

    ~ speak truth ~
     
  5. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :( powerful...good writin
     
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    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi,

    This is very well written!! Very profound piece!! I am glad you wrote about this. It needs to be addressed. This happens to many girls way too often!!

    ~Sierra~
     
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    Although this was so painful to read, knowing we've all known someone who has experienced this...perhaps someone in our family...yes it still happens but yes it was more common in the context in which you wrote. Our grandmothers etc. However, within another perspective...This is the best writing I've seen of your work. Very talented, even more so when the reader feels this deeply. "Bravo"
     
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    Wow SwtT this here made me cry! My heart breaks for the stolen fruits of my sisters! tHE ONES WITHOUT THE VOICES!


    TYTE piece!
     
  9. Lahana Mysteria

    Lahana Mysteria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I sense there's more to the story...
    The writing gives one the urge to want to turn the page and find out what happens next...
     
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    thank you for this piece swtt
    truth is the stongest of scribes
    peace
    khasm
     
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