Black Poetry : The Water

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by EbonyQueen06, Sep 21, 2004.

  1. EbonyQueen06

    EbonyQueen06 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    U remind me of the water
    I need you to survie
    And refresh me when I'm dehydrated mentally

    U remind me of the water
    U cleanse me when I have a bad day
    U make that zealant feelin come back to my heart

    U remind me of the water
    You are something powerful
    And something ravishing to admire

    U remind me of the water
    I can't get away from u
    Everywhere I go I think of my baby

    U remind me of the water
    U clashed into the blue
    I liked the way u obsorbed through my skin

    U remind me of the water
    It's a good thing to have you on me
    You cause wonderful things to happen

    U remind me of the water
    Sometime u may be gone
    But u always have a way of coming back

    U remind me of the water
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice posed of ones heart and emotions...thanks for sharing apart of you with us..... :angel1:
     
  3. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Definitely liked this one ma.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked how you used the metaphor of the water in this scribe. And using blue lettering just added to the flowing affect.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was very nice the way u did it made it watery
    flow on poet
     
  6. EbonyQueen06

    EbonyQueen06 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank-you everybody I really appreciate the love and the person I wrote about really does remind me of the water
     
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    Pharaoh Jahil Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was nice... Write on sis.
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a very refreshing piece, sounds like a wonderful guy
     
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    water, cleansing to the soul and all else..........water....8 cups a days keeps the pain away..............have a cup.......... :x:
     
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    EbonyQueen06 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank-u thank- u I really appreciate all the love ur goin to make this tom boy cry :crying:
     
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