Black Poetry : The Warrior Mice

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  1. Harry Hyman

    Harry Hyman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The Warrior Mice

    The orange and gold of the dark desert floor
    did fade with the plummet of the Sun
    -and the red heat ebbed in the twilight
    -while the blue stars twinkled in the nightlight.
    -When the brown sand shifted in the moonlight,
    Two mice did run, run, run

    thru a deep, deep gully of an upslant hill
    over sand in the night sublime.
    -Their hearts beat faster in the lost light
    -from impending disaster of a fright night
    -by the claws of an Owl now in midflight
    as its wings sliced the air from behind.

    But as Warrior Mice hunting on the hot desert sand
    and designed for evasive speeds,
    -they flickered thru shadows of the night time,
    -criss-crossed the black road's white line,
    -confused the Owl's sight line
    bringing food for their young 'uns needs.

    And the orange and gold of the bright desert floor
    were the paints of the dawn's display
    -as the mice peeked once at the daylight
    -thru the sweltering heat that was airtight
    -while the sand grew hot in the sunlight
    and the Owl waited close of the day.

    Soon, sunset light poured its colors into night
    dimming day into indigo and black
    -on the sounds and the silences of evening
    -near the shadows of the forest life teeming
    -where the Dusk of the night is asleeping
    with a dream of the Dawn coming back.

    Then the orange and gold of the dark desert floor
    disappeared with the plummet of the Sun
    -and the red heat ebbed in the twilight
    -while the blue stars twinkled in the nightlight.
    -When the brown sand shifted in the moonlight,
    Two mice did run, run, run.

    Namyh
     
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    man ...i tell u this here and that mice ....what a perfect picture painted enjoyed this.
     
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    Rich – Thanks Rich for your enjoyment. I thought I would try a different scheme of rhyme that would take the reader for a gallop. Hopefully, it’s the stuff of Mice and Owls where dreams of survival chant their inspiration to us. Namyh
     
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    This is nice!

    Sounds like rhymes for children, more please! :)

    Nice pattern, Brother. Creativity abound.

    One.

    - Ikoro
     
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    Ikoro – Just like the mice, we humans are often forced to pick and choose our times for survival. As for adults ? We are just children grown up, often running around like mice. Hope this put a smile on ya brother. Namyh
     
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    Harry, this was fantastic....Gosh, your creativity is so sweet.
     
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    sweetapplepie – Ahhhh Shucks sweetapplepie ! Thanks. Namyh
     
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    Once again, you give us wisdom to ponder, and vivid ink to enjoy poet.
     
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    Waz – Amazing it is that Nature’s daily portrait of survival is painted by the strength, resiliency and determination of the underdog not to die today. I just feel proud to provide the colored ink crayons which help make vivid its vast canvas. ‘Cause if we look real close, in the upper “right” hand corner slightly above the mice, we can see ourselves pondering that same daily wisdom. And in the upper “left” hand corner, there’s a giant Owl saying “Now what's for lunch, mouse or man.” Now you got me ranting but thanks for your words and enjoyment Waz. Namyh
     
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    Hi harry :read:
    Reading your works push me to relearn my literary familiarity :read:
    I enjoy pieces that inspire thought.
    I ESPECIALLY enjoy when you can read a piece once over and then learn something new from it after reading again.
    Good stuff :) :read: :)
     
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