Black Poetry : The war of two minds

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Faint whisps of colour dart around your face,
    A distant image emerging from the darkness,
    Flashing in my mind as I remember,
    All the things you said and did,
    All the ways your hurt me,
    Plunging a dagger deep in to my soul,
    And yet still I said sorry.
    Weak and frail, I begged and pleaded,
    Destroying myself in my attempts to survive.
    Breaking down and crying in front of you,
    Yet your eyes were black like the night;
    Cold and uncaring.
    You walked on; ignoring the pitiful sight before you.
    Never knowing what you did until the fear;
    It grasped me tight around the heart,
    Shaking me, throttling me until I fought to breathe,
    Yet you found it to be a lie,
    Disbelieving me with two-faced comforts.
    You helped me, yet at the same time caused more damage.
    I could not face you; scared of what I'd find in the eyes,
    I cowered, running, fleeing and panicking;
    Breaking down with anxiety and pain,
    A daily event; for I saw you often,
    And it contributed to the death of my spirit,
    Untill I couldn't take it;
    So I took the pills,
    Unperscribed yet I thought they would save me,
    Something you'd never done.
    Crying and screaming when I failed,
    I broke down again, my word crumbling beneath my feet,
    What were you doing to me?
    I begged for help, falling low at your merciless feet,
    Yet you stamped hard on my hands,
    Crushing my fingers before kicking me away;
    You'd had enough,
    But so had I; I tried again and again, each time to be beaten,
    Untill I couldn't try anymore,
    And the angst grew too strong;
    My constant thoughts of you devoured me,
    And I wrote down some feeble words,
    Determined to get them to you;
    To make you see.
    I needed the horror in your eyes,
    And the dreaded realisation,
    Before I let the blood drip from my wrist.
    You saw. You hurt. I suceeded,
    Yet I survived, destorying the careful layout.
    I didn't mean to; messed up timing,
    It all went so deadly wrong, yet no one died.
    Not this time; you're already weak,
    Although I can't deny I'm weaker,
    Still holding on to what isn't there,
    I'm destined to fall;
    Will you push me or kick me like before?
    It seems you wil; you too can't take this.
    This way can be closure for us all,
    So let me just say, in finality the words I need you to hear:
    Goodbye.
     
  2. Khasm13

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  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am with Khasm dayum this heartfelt you had me in this one
    i could feel the hurt and pain ...Peace be still Angel
     
  4. Lynne'

    Lynne' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow-this was a sad piece and I can feel ur pain of being Dangerously in Love
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When love goes horribly wrong, it can still be excruciating to say goodbye, but one must to save self. Your words were piercing, this was such a well written piece poet.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I agree - painful but beautiful write.
     
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