Black Short Stories : The Vow

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  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    on love and true commitment...
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    He loved her at first sight. She was so beautiful, so perfect; perfect
    skin, perfect eyes. Standing at a statuesque 5 feet ll inches, he was proud
    to have her on his arm. His beauty queen...

    She loved him too. He was a good man. He worked hard, he had dreams. He
    was handsome; and most importantly, he loved her dearly.

    He was faithful.

    She was, too.

    They lived in their marital cocoon ~ going through all the things most
    marrieds do...

    he would be frustrated at times because he noticed how alone he would
    feel...alone and misunderstood. But he'd look at her. She was so
    beautiful; she was so, very beautiful.

    He'd convince himself he still loved her as much as that first day.

    Time passed, and she became stricken with an illness for which there is no
    cure. An illness, that, in time, would ravage her body and render her as
    helpless as a newborn baby.

    For days and nights and weeks and months, they cried together...and nights
    when he lay awake, he cried alone in silence.

    She had been so beautiful.

    And the ugliness of her disease began to take its toll - mostly on her mind.
    She became incorrigible; down right mean.

    He understood that she was angry. But he was battered mercilessly, daily.
    He took it all in; still managed to smile.

    She became hateful. And one day, her beauty was gone. She blamed him for
    her misfortune. She became accusatory and paranoid.

    She was too ugly to look upon. Even in her sleep, he could see no peace.

    And the disease slowly destroyed her body, but her mind had long since
    succombed.

    He stayed beside her. Broken; only half the man he had been when they said
    "I do"...

    as he prepared her liquid medication, he remembered the many times he'd been
    tempted to go astray...there had been so many opportunities to find comfort
    in the willing arms of another ~

    ...with the exception of a business trip that found him in the arms of a
    stranger, one night only - he never went outside his cocoon...


    ...as he lifted the glass to her lips, he repeated the words that they had
    declared before God and the witnesses present, so many years before: "for
    richer, for poorer, for better, for worse, in sickness and in health, till
    death do us part"...


    {he is twice the man he was on the day they wed}



    Alyce, 2000
     
  2. MsDLite

    MsDLite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beauty...

    beyond words...

    if only we understood and realized the depth
    of commintment...

    too beautiful...sis
     
  3. Bert

    Bert Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ms. A...

    you bring out the idealist that is sometimes buried deep inside me. I am like an infant when it comes to understanding and embracing the beautiful message of this story. I'm hoping to grow up in love, if there's still time.

    Thank you for this story. It feels real, in an unreal kind of way.

    BRB
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u know alyce

    not too many know the real deal of the VOW
    spoken under oath and misused da true meanning
    this story takes me back to my first & last wife...
    sistah don't i have a hellava story to tell......
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    one that need to seen again !
    love this to the max peep dis y'all ...
     
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