Black Poetry : The Visitor

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  1. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Sensing a presence in my room
    I felt a sudden peace
    Hovering in the quiet air
    Night-time stillness unbroken
    Wide awake was I
    Reviewing my day,
    Planning tasks for the morrow
    With eyes open, scanning my familiar things
    As an unseen weight depressed the side of my bed
    But I was not afraid
    For just a few moments, it stayed
    Not a sound, I made
    Lying still

    Whatever it was, I knew it was sent from Above
    My darkened bedroom seemed canopied with love
    I remembered my mother perching beside me, just so, in life
    Surely, no Hellish spirit could produce such calm
    But, briefly, some serene entity served a goodnight balm

    Lying still
    Not a sound, I made
    For just a few moments, it stayed
    But I was not afraid
    As an unseen weight depressed the side of my bed
    With eyes open, scanning my familiar things
    Planning tasks for the morrow,
    Reviewing my day
    Wide awake was I
    Night-time stillness unbroken
    Hovering in the quiet air,
    I felt a sudden peace
    Sensing a presence in my room.

     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ahhhh!! seem like i can feel it too after reading this awesome drop sis
     
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    his was so peaceful and calm to read I really enjoyed the poetic trip you took me on.
     
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    Hi CherryB...

    The entire piece was enjoyed, but mostly that wonderful scripted line!

    I've always been afraid of the dark because of what might or could not be seen, but with such a presence as you painted a peaceful night would be received.

    Nice done!

    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:dance:
     
  5. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Thank you much, Rich!


    Yes, it was very peaceful, Sister....peaceful and calming.

    Well, I'm certainly glad if this piece in any way helped chase the "Boogey Man" away. :)


    Here's my confession.....I'm not afraid of the dark but I can't sleep with my bedroom closet open. :10500: lol
     
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    very serene...made me want to close my eyes.

    My favorite line was:

    "Surely, no Hellish spirit could produce such calm
    But, briefly, some serene entity served a goodnight balm"

    ...smooth poem
     
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    Familiar dreams go bump in the night.

    Thanks for sharing such a beautiful thing.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Thank you very much, Brothers NittyGrit and 1Poet!
     
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