Black Poetry : The Visitor

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  1. cherryblossom

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    Sensing a presence in my room
    I felt a sudden peace
    Hovering in the quiet air
    Night-time stillness unbroken
    Wide awake was I
    Reviewing my day,
    Planning tasks for the morrow
    With eyes open, scanning my familiar things
    As an unseen weight depressed the side of my bed
    But I was not afraid
    For just a few moments, it stayed
    Not a sound, I made
    Lying still

    Whatever it was, I knew it was sent from Above
    My darkened bedroom seemed canopied with love
    I remembered my mother perching beside me, just so, in life
    Surely, no Hellish spirit could produce such calm
    But, briefly, some serene entity served a goodnight balm

    Lying still
    Not a sound, I made
    For just a few moments, it stayed
    But I was not afraid
    As an unseen weight depressed the side of my bed
    With eyes open, scanning my familiar things
    Planning tasks for the morrow,
    Reviewing my day
    Wide awake was I
    Night-time stillness unbroken
    Hovering in the quiet air,
    I felt a sudden peace
    Sensing a presence in my room. ​
     
  2. Clyde C Coger Jr

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    In the Spirit of Sankofa!

    .........The Visitor


    Good script, scribe poetess cherryblossom


     
  3. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Thanks, Clyde! It's not just a scribe but a true story.
     
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    Really, I sorta felt that cherryblossom:wink:, since your mentioning of the Veil:)Visitor

     
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    Actually, those two subjects are not related, at least, not with the same person, that is.

    My family has had many varied phenomenon occur within it, male and female.
     
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    Okay cherryblossom thanks for clearing that up, shall we continue with this?

     
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    Only if you prefer. But sincere thanks again for the feedback!
     
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    Lets play it by ear, cherryblossom, and you are quite welcome for the feedback, for real.

     
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    I kinda know a bit about these kinda things ......Da image in the mirror
    the visitor
     
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    The visitor could have indeed been your mother, checking on you once again, assuring that all is ok. I found this to be quite touching poetess.
    And....I also have to make mention of the structure of this piece. Your final "stanza" reversed your first. I admire the detail that went into penning this piece in this manner. Excellent flow poetess, wow.
     
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