Black Poetry : The Velvet Touch

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  1. AACOOLDRE

    AACOOLDRE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The Velvet touch

    By Andre Austin

    Oh my thematic Virgins
    I just got pimped out the studios,
    Because the gossip of Virgins never go stale
    I’m caught up in a vortex
    For getting too visionary with verbs

    And all the Vestals virgins of Ra
    Threatening to give me a vile velvet touch
    With their scared fire burning my village
    If I dear to playwright on the vulva

    If that happens I will ring my Vulcan phone
    Cause Vulcan’s carry fire sticks too
    Causing inflammation of the vulvitis
    So don’t try to be saving Victoria’s secrets
    Cause I got vcr’s and videotapes,
    That could vent vasectomies on your vanity

    These vipers will dispense with me
    The VIP miss treatment of my body
    Leaving my body vertically prone,
    Soaking in vinegar
    Verily, verily I say it’s so true
    There will be no pietas or vital statistics
    Being wrote or oil paintings of my image

    I might have to change the venue
    To escaped being vaporized
    From all of these here vandals
    Trying to plug valves of the vivid
    Trying to be like vampires allowing blood to run
    Because it reads if it bleeds a vintage

    No one will voice
    The hidden meaning of this volume 1 tale
    You can’t protect Virgins that grow
    With gossips that eventually grow stale
     
  2. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is some tight X-tra ****!!!!

    Off da creative globe!!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    vel of essence

    a perfect touch of spray ya flow captures my thoughts
    lovin dis...............................................................:) :) :)
     
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    Interesting Verbiage..
    but then, you always come
    interesting like that.....The Velvet Touch
    I like it...keep flowin.


    Epiphany :heart:
     
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    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aacooldre...i'm lovin' this piece, it's tyght! keep on scribin'...i'm watchin' yo talent, mos def.
     
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    I feel the alliteration bruh. You made it flow smoothly without overbearing the reader (that's not easy to do). Well written.

    peace
    blak
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dre

    Q said it best dog!!!

    Off da Globe!

    Much Respect
    Reas
     
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