Black Poetry : The Veil in Detail, Part III, A Watz Elaboration Series, Inspired by Angelicsage

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beware...the veil is a curse

    Oh lacy veil, of exquisite woven cloth.
    You're not a mere temptation, it's worse.
    I looked upon you for vanity sake,
    only to discover that you're a curse.
    An incantation randomly executed.
    A hex no soul can break.
    A spell thats been around so long,
    it makes your ancestors shake.
    Are you the voodoo doll, that gets stabbed,
    or the piercing pins thrust in?
    You cause unexplained writhing, and pain.
    To cause so much suffering is a sin.
    The number thirteen, you are.
    Settling on a Friday, of course.
    A day that Murphy's Law comes to pass,
    it will go wrong, just consider the source.
    You are the millions of glass shreds
    from the shattered mirror, broken.
    Forty years of bad luck,
    the veil in detail has spoken.
    There's no potion that can be swallowed,
    no trance that one can induce,
    no charm that can be worn,
    only God above can possibly deduce
    a solution to this horror.
    Get down on your knees
    NOW
    And pray....

    Beware, the veil is a curse.....
     
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    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Likes the depth of your mind
    Keep flowing
    Very nice read :spinstar:

    Peace and love
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you twision. Sometimes I have to oil up those wheels, lol, but they eventually start turning.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    a continue openning of the veil
    thankz for dis
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I remember that the veil intrigued you, well, me too. Not sure how far I'll go with this, Rich, but I'm rollin with it for now. Thank you, brotha.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Part 4, the final installment to this series, making an appreance at some point today. If you're gonna jump in Sage, get that parachute ready....
     
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    Sister....you shook the very foundation
    of my soul with this...*whew*
    you're a poet...but you're also
    a Dynamic Creative Writer...
    your work is beyond poetry itself
    I could never have jumped in on this...
    I'm just humbled to be reading girl...
    When I get my courage up...
    I'll see what these meager hands
    can conjur up...lol...
    this was phenomenal... :sand:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OK, Sage, I had to get myself together after reading this one. True response of a queen, raising another up, giving no credit to self, when you must know you're a genius at this. Your support always comes right on time, more than you'll ever know.
     
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    Okay I'm hooked!
    Extraordinary read!
    Now where's part 4?
    Nevermind I Found it!
    (Floating right along.)
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    PoeticMoons, I'm so happy to know this has taken you in, and you're ready for more. Thank you.
     
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