Black Poetry : The V Formation

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  1. imoonlitskies

    imoonlitskies Member MEMBER

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    The V Formation

    Why can't we
    Be like birds
    That fly
    Together
    In a V
    So that we
    Can be
    A family?
    For support...
    For life...
    Through strife...
    In the depths of the darkest
    Night?

    Why can't I
    Lean on you
    In my time of need
    So that we can be at ease
    From all the pain that we
    See?
    Together...
    We can succeed

    Why do I feel alone…
    And thrown?
    The unknown
    It's too much to bare
    My prayers
    Full of despair
    It's unfair
    This affair
    I'm unaware
    Of where I belong...

    It's so wrong…

    This song that
    I sing
    Doesn't bring
    Anything
    But more pain...
    I am slain
    In vain
    I struggle to hold on
    Because I am drawn
    By this thought
    That we can be
    Like birds
    That fly together in a V
    A family
    For support
    For life
    Through strife
    In the depths of the darkest
    Night…
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Keep singing that song, and we shall come together in that "V" ..that's ever so needed.
    Nice piece poet, I like this drop.
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Loved the concept and message in this. I can envision in my mind, a v formation of birds as I ponder the question you put forth. It would be wonderful if it could happen. Well written write.
     
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    surely it's heard loud and clear and someday the V will be reality
    tyte drop and message spoken within
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...this piece reminds me of a book called "Gung Ho"...
    that deals with organizational leadership and development
    which covers The Spirit of the Squirrel,The Way of the Beaver and
    quite naturally.... The Gift of the Goose


    Aaawe yes, the lessons that we could learn within the V-formation of geese


    Wonderfully thematic prose!

    Much love,
    Sage
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yo, what a great image, love the concept. I would also love for there to be more unity. I'm so feelin ya.
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm diggin the analogy poet. Well written. Keep the ink runnin'

    Peace
    blak
     
  8. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow, very well written
     
  9. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    keep sing in time it will come...very well posed thanks for sharing.....
     
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