Black Poetry : The Thorn In My Pen

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  1. brotherman

    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The Thorn In My Pen

    The thorn in my pen
    Reflects back to when
    I first succumbed to her, thus calling her my friend

    I just could not see it then
    Knowledge base
    Brand new of her
    Her presentation was so precise
    Cool as ice
    Her game was smooth
    Because I was just another dude
    Like any other she was attracted to

    Despite the spiritual
    Her sights were set on physical
    And in my righteous ignorance
    I thought that God had sent a miracle
    On that day
    But even to this day
    I reminience and play the script
    Of our brief friendship
    Brief courtship
    As brief as brevity can get

    Dipped deep into her destinations
    She had destined for me
    See, she never told me –her game
    Just her name
    All because it was her intention
    To feel these sparks and flames
    Like all others I had nothing to lose
    Plus all her sexual contents to gain

    The easiest
    Most freakiest
    Sexual endeavor
    That I never even have to work for
    So what more
    Can the typical brother ask for

    Oh mind you, though she ain’t no hoe
    Oh she was cooool
    Yes she was chiiiillll
    Ask any ***** she was someone to hang with for real
    “for reeeallll”

    So everytime she did the things she knew to do so well
    My statistical reactions and egotistical head would swell

    Expanding in its capacity
    Restricting the ability to let thoughts of common sense prevail

    To derail that train in its tracks
    Close my eyes to all the pleasure so I could look at the facts
    That…the only reason she’s so cool
    Is because she’s only being freaky for you ……for right now

    But what happens when she gets enough
    Gives up
    Ready to fukk the next interest
    After you have proclaimed to the world
    That she is another Queen to this universe
    Just because you thought you was the first
    To place your penis in her mouth
    Signifying what you both have is special…

    Different from them other hoes you just cool with from time to time…

    Believing the many acts you’ve done together
    Without you
    she
    May
    Have
    Never
    Experienced

    See, the thorn in my pen
    Reflects back then
    When I didn’t keep it real
    When I simply refused to see the deal
    Inquisitive on how much better it could feel –the next time

    Flirting with my passions
    Against my principles and unbeatable odds
    I’ve suffered the consequences
    With good intentions
    As revealed many times before by God

    So what has changed
    About your game
    Is it friend
    Partner
    Or what?

    The thorn
    In my pen
    Rage
    It wage war with no end
    Until that thorn
    In my side
    Is given up

    ….yeah.


    Brotherman, October 2002
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man dis here had me all up into it
    ya pen thorn is mighty
    but she was wow!!
    relax back and let thangz take it's place
    i'm feel ya here
     
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    klabarron Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    BrotherMan, BrotherMan

    Exquisitely written! Dayummmm this it tyte!!! Man this was good flow.
     
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    Twofish Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I agree...tyte flow for sho - insightful detail into a man's psyche.

    1luv
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    people are fickle
    can't judge a book by the cover
    people tell you one thing and do another

    and all that other sh*t

    yo these read the a short movie
    mad graphic

    peace

    DSS
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Brother

    This poem was like that!!!

    Tight
    Reas
     
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    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was dope as hell

    i really really like it

    keep writtin and ima keep reading
     
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    all i can say is wow

    just wow
     
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