Black Poetry : The Thickness

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it seemed like the dayz when she could just wash
    the sunlight streaming through the windows
    and let her soul breathe,
    was a passing thought
    that was unthinkable at the tyme
    for now she was cramped into the confines
    of a maddening soul prison...
    her body was laid waste in these rolls of fat
    that seemingly engulfed her entire being...

    she would take her fingers and close them
    around posters of models and stars
    and situate them close to her heart...
    she listened for a heart beat....

    ice cream would be ssooo sweet in her mouth,
    but midnights she would find herself under the sheets,
    for the damage it did to her...
    maybe one day she will find release...

    (good morning everyone, i know this isn't the best but u have to excuze me im kinda groggy, just woke up and felt inspired, lol, so i sneaked down here and posted somfin, going back to bed now, hope u like it,
    :heart:
    -story

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  2. PurpleMoons

    PurpleMoons Administrator STAFF

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    AWWE! You are so sweet! LOL!
    Dang! You mean you layed this
    out with one eye opened?
    Gurl you got skillz!
    You just captured my heart.
    So many people I know be
    feeling this way. Sometimes I
    wish that I could chase their
    insecurities away!
    Tyte scribe! I loved it!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    eyez half open for that morning poetic wake up
    this was tyte and awesome u really have a gift
    keep expressing it ........i love it
     
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    nice drop
    it was sweet
    thanks for sharing
     
  5. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol..thanks for the love yall...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    You flowed with this just right, describing that uncomfortable feeling that can creep into the soul.
     
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    see...your inspiration and gift
    doesn't care how early or how
    late...it's on point...24hrs a day
    you captured the state of so
    many...wow..the imagery was
    so real...^5
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol.....thanks sis, i DID have one eye open literally like sistah moons said though..lol...i was dozin and junk...:sleep: anyway thanks for the words...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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