Black Poetry : "the syndrome" greatest love lost

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  1. tzevi1278

    tzevi1278 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I chase daydreams but sleep escapes me,
    I'm not as strong as I seem, cause my feelings rape me,
    Stripped of my sanity. . . somewhat careless lately,
    Played the game of love, but it played me greatly.
    Too late to debate see, depression sets in,
    I not only lost a great lover, I've lost my best friend.
    Hard to comprehend when you're forced to contend
    With the likes of a love that's clearly a GOD send.
    Not here to regard men, or categorize sin,
    I just don't wanna pretend I'm not at fault at the end.
    Hard to get sleep,
    Food consumptions obsolete,
    And my memories of you is like a song stuck on repeat,
    Flashbacks of the sheets, we made poetry together,
    Love was a byproduct of our past bad weather.
    We were past love letters, past the infatuation,
    Past soul mates, this was love actuation.
    BUT I [email protected] UP THE ROTATION !!!
    The record couldn't spin, the lies came in
    And then began our descend.
    [email protected] where you been, I was trying to take you where?
    Potential perfection, but I wasn't quite there.
    Wasn't quite here, quite often near,
    But the distance was clear.
    You saw it in my eyes, written on my face,
    I gave you an incomplete image, very poorly traced.
    I wish I could erase the pain on your face,
    But my track record proves, it'll just be replaced.
    What a [email protected]' disgrace, grandma rolling in her grave,
    Forced to observe how her baby behaves.
    Yea, those were the days, I'm already reminiscing,
    I wonder how I'mma hold up when that 48th hour kicks in
    .
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tzevi1278:
    Wow!!!! Now this piece surely hit home with me.
    I know what your going through as I have
    travel this road. Don't wanna go back.
    You hang in there trust me, time does heal
    all wounds. And you never know you might
    get a 2nd chance, just give it a little time.
    I know easier said than done:) But its possible.
    You laid this piece out. Well expressed.


    Much Luv
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You'll hold up brotha, but it won't be easy. You truly captured that feeling of that special love lost, with wonderful rhymes and word play to boot. Peace to you.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I mean this really say a lot to me and surely that 48th will come
    yet not easy to river in awesome scribe tzevi
     
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    smoothsoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Absolute brilliance Bro. I was captivated from the very beginning by this piece and intrigued throughout all of it.
     
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