Black Poetry : The Sun Used to Be Behind the Clouds

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lion and lamb
    laying side by side
    Eloquence cusses like a sailor
    leaving mute voices and mouths opened wide

    The moon rises and sets
    The days aren't nearly as bright
    The sun shines when we normally dream
    Becoming a confusing nightlight

    Loved ones are strangers
    suddenly clueless to who you are at all
    Enemies know you inside and out
    Intuitively responding to your every beck and call

    Smooth roads become stumbling blocks
    tripping you up with each step you take
    Rocky roads somehow easy to traverse
    Steering your course, a piece of cake

    This world...it's turned upside down
    Entire *** backwards, at least the world I see
    When oh so much that couldn't be
    and shouldn't be
    Somehow
    Simply
    Is....
     
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    And when there seem to be
    no tomorrow or a change
    just a ball of hurt dat stain
    every glass , i've watch from sadness
    kissing only what i didn't see

    As the clouds roll away
    what look to be bright and sunny
    is da light of confusional maze
    i play this picture u painted
    deep in da depth of me
    yet i'm still daze


    I can feel every line word displayed right here u touch da pit of me unbound
     
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    And maybe the clouds aren't even clouds
    at all, just globs of useless fluff
    Designed to trick and conceal
    All that sinister, menacing stuff

    The moon turns me into a howling beast
    and the sun burns each time I try to touch it
    This makes my soul scream to realize such ****
    My heart aches to the point I must clutch it


    Feeling your lines as well Rich, thank you for feeling me here...
     
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    In the Spirit of Sankofa!




    watzinaname,

    WoW! I certainly know what is in your name, Deepness! What a piece, poetess! Several lines really struck me, as highlighted above!

     
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    Thank you for taking the time to respond and for highlighting the parts which stood out for you. Appreciated brother Clyde Coger.
     
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    No problem watzinaname, not at all, thank you for the work, my Friend!

     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your support means much Brother Clyde, thanks again.
     
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    upside down, it is...

    understanding this is key to turning it around.

    SEEING THE WORLD AS IT IS.

    shine the light of enlightenment on us all.
     
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    Well dear, it's been a while since we met here. Your work reflects a lot of hope, a lot of dreams and perhaps the hidden idea that "it is not the world at all but the people in it". I enjoyed this.
     
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    watzinaname,

    The posters and poets have all spoken truth to Power, baller and keita, thanks so much!

     
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